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Bookreview I was writing a bookreview for my English class and i need your help... I Am Not A Serial Killer by Dan Wells tells the story about John Wayne Cleaver, he’s 15 years old and whom lives and works with his mother at a mortuary. He has been diagnosed with antisocial behavior, this means that … John will be a serial killer in the future; he tries to be normal but he isn’t, because he hasn't feelings and he want to hurt toward others, including his family, so for this reason he has a rules for control his actions, because John knows that he’s destined to become a serial killer. But the things changes to John when in Clayton appears a Serial Killer, so… John throws his rules to the trash, because he wanna knows who is the serial killer, this obsession change his mind and start the game for him. The Clayton’s murderer has a different patrons than others killers, and John doesn't know for why reason, so…this is a play game for him and he’s like a FBI agent, but he has a reason, he wants to kill the serial killer, but he doesn’t know who is the murderer. The killer is more near than he imagined, but when he recognizes the killer serial intentions is too late. John lost so many things for his fails in the investigation, but now he knows who and what is the killer; The murderer is a demon and John tries to kill the killer. But the things didn't end to John…

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I was writing a bookreview for my English class and i need your help...

I Am Not A Serial Killer by Dan Wells tells the story about John Wayne Cleaver, he’s 15 years old and whom lives and works with his mother at a mortuary. He has been diagnosed with antisocial behavior, this means that … John will be a serial killer in the future;. he tries to be normal but he isn’t; because he hasn't does not have feelings and he want to hurt toward others, including his family. so For this reason he has a rules for to control his actions, because John knows that he’s destined to become a serial killer.

But the things changes to John when in Clayton appears a Serial Killer, so… John throws his rules to the trash, because he wantsna knows who is the serial killer,. This obsession changes his mind and starts the game for him. The Clayton’s murderer has a different patrons victims than others killers, and John doesn't know for why what reason, so…this is a like playing a game for him and he’s acting like a FBI agent. but he has a reason, He wants to kill the serial killer, but he doesn’t know who is the murderer is.

The killer is more near closer than he imagined, but when he recognizes the killer serial (swap to serial killer) intentions it is too late. John lost so many things for his fails *** in pursuit of the investigation, but now he knows who and what is the killer; The murderer is a demon and John tries to kill/murder the killer/murderer. ( I'd alternate kill/murder otherwise it sounds a bit funny so kills the murderer or murders the killer would work better in my opinion)

***(unsure what you wish to say regarding failure. If you are trying to say the investigation was a failure I'd word it as "John lost many things during the investigation which I deem as a failure" However, I think you are implying he lost things because of his own personal failures in which case "John's shortcomings caused him to lose many things during the investigation". 

But the things didn't end to for John…*** concluding statement is a bit confusing, from what I infer from previous paragraph John ends up succeeding in killing the killer so I'd state that) 

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