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It was a beautiful day today. Mom suggested we go to the hairdresser after lunch. Usually, Dad trims my hair, but this time, Mom admitted he wasn't good enough. The salon was busy, but Mom had made an appointment beforehand. Later, I realized that Mom had mostly went there for herself. She spent hours and a fortune on her hair, and I had to wait patiently for centuries. It seemed like I was just an excuse. If I hadn't been there, Dad would have objected. On the way home, we bought more supplies for our trip. I'm excited and ready to go.
Oct 4, 2024 11:22 AM
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It was a beautiful day today. Mom suggested we go to the hairdresser after lunch. Usually, Dad trims my hair, but this time, Mom admitted he wasn't doing good enough job. The salon was busy, but Mom had made an appointment beforehand. Later, I realized that Mom had mostly gone there for herself. She spent hours and a fortune on her hair, and I had to wait patiently for centuries. It seemed like I was just an excuse. If I hadn't been there, Dad would have objected. On the way home, we bought more supplies for our trip. I'm excited and ready to go.
A minor chnage and addition, Just to see how we can make it better
October 5, 2024
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It was a beautiful day today. Mom suggested we go to the hairdresser after
lunch. Usually, Dad trims my hair, but this time, Mom admitted he wasn't good
enough. The salon was busy, but Mom had made an appointment beforehand. Later, I
realized that Mom had mostly gone there for herself. She spent hours and a
fortune on her hair, and I had to wait patiently for centuries. It seemed like I
was just an excuse. If I hadn't been there, Dad would have objected. On the way
home, we bought more supplies for our trip. I'm excited and ready to go.
I hope you like your hair!
October 4, 2024
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The Tim じぁん!!!
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Chinese (Mandarin), English, Japanese
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English
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