Nice text with a neat organization of paragraphs! The content is very useful too.✨ My thoughts over your text is that it is pretty good, but with a couple things that need to be fixed, amongst them: lack of clarity in the construction of some sentences and lack of connectives. The first one I mean is when you are not so clear about what you want to say, like in “There being a clear diet in time in Italy”. I had to reread it a couple times to get what you mean (and I’m not sure if I did it). Things like that made me change some sentences almost entirely (sorry if I turned something differently from what you meant 😅). Therefore, my advice to fix this is to study the correct structure of English sentences, you will end up finding out a lot of useful things that you didn’t know so far. A simple Google search will teach you a lot. Now about the connectives, they make all the difference when you are writing a text. They tie ideas together, making your text look more cohesive. I put some connectives like: For example, in addition to that, therefore... They are amazing. You can find more connectives searching for that on Google too. I hope it helps you in some way. Keep it up 🥂