Can you correct my text? I wrote my answer for same question as other position today.
Q. Scholarships should be offered primarily on the basis of financial need, rather than on academic achievement. Agree or disagree with this statement and give concrete examples to support your answer.
My answer from disagree position↓
I disagree with the idea that scholarships should be offered primarily based on financial need, rather than academic achievement. There are two reasons for this : attracting talented applicants and motivating students to work harder.
To begin, a school can attract more talented students if it grants scholarships based on academic achievement rather than financial need . Talented students would raise other student's enthusiasm for everything.It's a nice effects for school.
Second, it is good way to offer scholarships based on academic achievement in order to motivate students to work harder.
For these reasons, I disagree with the idea. While it may be nice idea that scholarships should be offered primarily on the basis of financial need, I think way of offering scholarships on academic achievement has many good effects for students and schools.
October 2nd Sat. 2021