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李千金
when my father walked with me to the train station, I saw there were many seagulls flying over the Hai River. It reminded me that when I was at middle school, I sat by the Hai River with my classmate, drinking beer and watching seagulls during the lunch break. At the time, there were not so many seagulls in our city. So they were very new to us. We talked about what they are. Normally we call them seagulls, but it’s a river. She said, “then they are rivergulls.” I was feeling nostalgic all of a sudden and didn’t want to say goodbye. When was young there was a very popular Korean drama called “autumn in my heart”. The protagonist said that if there is another life, She wants to be a tree, then she will not be separated with anything around her. If a tree had feelings, it would not have been so lush green.
Aug 22, 2024 3:06 PM
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when my father walked with me to the train station, I saw there were many seagulls flying over the Hai River. It reminded me that when I was in middle school, I sat by the Hai River with my classmate, drinking beer and watching seagulls during the lunch break. At the time, there were not as many seagulls in our city. So they were very new to us. We talked about what they were. Normally we call them seagulls, but it’s a river. She said, “then they should be rivergulls.” I was feeling nostalgic all of a sudden and didn’t want to say goodbye. When I was young, there was a very popular Korean drama called “autumn in my heart.” The protagonist said that if there was another life after this one, that she wanted to be a tree, then she would not be separated from anything around her. If a tree had feelings, it would not have been so lush and green.
August 23, 2024
When my father walked with me to the train station, I saw many seagulls flying over the Hai River. It reminded me that when I was in middle school, I sat by the Hai River with my classmate, drinking beer and watching seagulls during the lunch break. At that time, there were not so many seagulls in our city, so they were very new to us. We talked about what they were. Normally, we called them seagulls, but it was a river. She said, "Then they are river gulls." I felt nostalgic all of a sudden and did not want to say goodbye. When I was young, there was a very popular Korean drama called "Autumn in My Heart." The protagonist said that if she had another life, she wanted to be a tree, so she would not be separated from anything around her. If a tree had feelings, it would not have been so lush green.
Your writing paints a vivid picture of your memories by the Hai River. I appreciate how you connected your past experiences with the seagulls to your nostalgic feelings. To improve, focus on maintaining consistent verb tenses and using proper punctuation for dialogue. Keep up the great work!
August 22, 2024
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