Hi. Can youplease correct words or phrases in my short text if they sound unnatural. Thanks in advance.
"In my country teens worry (or "take care" is better?) about their appearance, therefore, (commas?) they prefer to buy (the?) personal care products more than food. Also, teens purchase on eating out. Video games and apps are popular as the things to purchase. One problem that can arise with spending money for teens is waste of money on unnecessary things. (the last sentence isn't well, is it? :( )

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Hi. Can youplease correct words or phrases in my short text if they sound unnatural. Thanks in advance.
"In my country teens worry (or "take care" is better?) about their appearance, therefore, (commas?) they prefer to buy (the?) personal care products more than food. Also, teens purchase on eating out. Video games and apps are popular as the things to purchase. One problem that can arise with spending money for teens is waste of money on unnecessary things. (the last sentence isn't well, is it? :(  )

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In my country teens worry about their appearance; therefore they prefer to buy personal care products more than food.  Video games and apps are popular things to purchase.  One problem that can arise for teens is wasting money on unnecessary things.

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Thank you very much! My problem's so many unnecessary words:)

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