ly12
In my life,Frist I should express thankful to my parents.They not only give my life and teach me how to become a better girl.Second I should thankful my sister,She helps me without gain.Third,I must express my thankful to my lover. It's him let me kown how woderful of the world.
Feb 15, 2021 9:26 AM
Corrections · 3
First, I should express my thanks to my parents.They not only gave me life (or 'brought me into this world'), but also taught me how to become a better girl. (Become a better girl is a bit 'Chinglish' Maybe 'they taught me to become the best person I can') Second, I should thank my sister, she helps me without expecting anything in return. Finally, I must also express my thanks to my lover. (Lover is not normally used, it can mean the boyfriend/girlfriend of someone who is already married! Better to use husband/boyfriend/partner) He made me realise how wonderful the world is. I would normally use firstly, secondly rather than first, second but both are ok. The last one should be 'finally'. In this type of writing I would avoid carrying on with thirdly, fourthly etc. That makes it too much like a list. 非常好, keep writing!
February 15, 2021
In my life, first I should express my gratitude to my parents.They not only gave me life and taught me how to become a better girl. Second I should thank my sister because she helps me without asking anything in return.Third, I must express my gratitude to my lover. It's he who let me know how wonderful the world is.
How sweet :) 'thankful' is an adjective. You should use the noun 'gratitude'.
February 15, 2021
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ly12
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English
Learning Language
English