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My teacher gave me an exercise of writing an essay (including 6 paragraphs) about parents and teenagers. Can you please help me correct my writing? "Over thousands of years, every family has built traditions and rules for members to follow to improve their relationship. Nevertheless, the problem between parents and their children still exists, especially when Gen Z's lifestyles are very different from the old generations. This essay will examine the major causes and show the solutions to this phenomenon. The first obvious reason is that parents and teenagers have different opinions about love. Parents want to show concern for their children's lives, education, and health by setting rules so they don't commit bad habits. In contrast, teenagers just want their parents to set them free and let them do whatever they want. This issue makes children conflict with their parents and stay away from their parent’s control The second fact we can see is that due to the fast pace of modern life, parents are now living busier and devoting an increasing amount of time to work. Since parents spend more time at work, they do not have time to talk and share their feeling with their children. Therefore, the distance between them is getting farther and farther and they cannot understand each other. In addition, with the development of society, parents are more worried about their children’s future. Therefore, they force their child to study a lot and unintentionally put them under pressure with high expectation. It can lead to children’s psychological problems and sadly many of them choose negative ways to escape this. In truth, some measures should be taken to resolve these prospective issues. If the family members want to improve their relationship, they need to understand other’ feelings. And by doing things which include spending more time hanging out and having meals together, they can easily achieve that. They also have their family rules to respect other members' privacy. Last
Oct 8, 2023 8:29 AM
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My teacher gave me an exercise of writing an essay (including 6 paragraphs) about parents and teenagers. Can you please help me correct my writing? "Over thousands of years, every family has built traditions and rules for members to follow to improve their relationship. Nevertheless, the problem between parents and their children still exists, especially when Gen Z's lifestyles are very different from the old generations. This essay will examine the major causes and show the solutions to this phenomenon. The first obvious reason is that parents and teenagers have different opinions about love. Parents want to show concern for their children's lives, education, and health by setting rules so they don't commit bad habits. In contrast, teenagers just want their parents to set them free and let them do whatever they want. This issue makes children conflict with their parents and stay away from their parent’s control The second fact we can see is that due to the fast pace of modern life, parents are now living busier and devoting an increasing amount of time to work. Since parents spend more time at work, they do not have time to talk and share their feeling with their children. Therefore, the distance between them is getting farther and farther and they cannot understand each other. In addition, with the development of society, parents are more worried about their children’s future. Therefore, they force their child to study a lot and unintentionally put them under pressure with high expectations. It can lead to children’s psychological problems and sadly many of them choose negative ways to escape this. In truth, some measures should be taken to resolve these prospective issues. If the family members want to improve their relationship, they need to understand others’ feelings. And by doing things which include spending more time hanging out and having meals together, they can easily achieve that. They also have their family rules to respect other members' privacy. Last
October 8, 2023
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.... but not least, remember the more they communicate with each other, the more their relationship will improve. In conclusion, there are three main factors which cause the conflict between parents and teenagers. We should try to close the generation gap and make family relationship better.
October 8, 2023
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