Mari Kim
Sam is at the library looking for Lily. When Jensen gave Sam a warm greeting, Sam was taken aback. Sam gets angry with Lily going outside in the middle of their conversations. Jensen remembers going to the same elementary school as Sam and asks her to help with the cupcake sale. Sam is not used to this situation, but she doesn't seem to hate it. Sam says yes, and Jensen gives her his number. Lily feels jealous when it seems like Sam makes friends with Jensen easily. Sam and Lily leave the library and head home. Sam says the house is like a prison. Lily thinks the house is the safest place to protect her. She looks at the house from outside to understand why Sam feels like a prison. From the outside, the house was hidden, so it was hard to see, and the ivy vine looked like tightening the house. Lily seems to understand why Sam said the house was like a prison. In the way, the house was like a trap. Could you please make my draft sound more natural? Thank you for your time and help.
Mar 23, 2022 9:37 AM
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Sam is at the library looking for Lily. When Jensen gave Sam a warm greeting, Sam was taken aback. Sam gets angry with Lily going outside in the middle of their conversations. Jensen remembers going to the same elementary school as Sam and asking her to help with the cupcake sale. Sam is not used to this situation, but she doesn't seem to hate it. Sam says yes, and Jensen gives her his number. Lily feels jealous when it seems like Sam makes friends with Jensen easily. Sam and Lily leave the library and head home. Sam says the house is like a prison. Lily thinks the house is the safest place to protect her. She looks at the house from outside to understand why Sam feels like a prison. From the outside, the house was hidden, so it was hard to see, and the ivy vine looked like tightening the house. Lily seems to understand why Sam said the house was like a prison. On the way, the house was like a trap. Could you please make my draft sound more natural? Thank you for your time and help.
March 24, 2022
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