Hey,
I am writing a lyric and want to say: "I have been inside a rat race".
There are two variations. I prefer the first, because the melody sounds better. But I believe, the sentence doesn't make sense.
Without "in that" the sentence means "I have been a rat race", doesn't it? Or is that covered under "artistic freedom"?
Variation 1:
Tell me, how we supposed to be
Inside the rat race I have been
A shudder on my skin
Variation 2:
Tell me, how we supposed to be
Inside the rat race in that I have been
A shudder on my skin
Would be glad about help!
Thanks in advance!