I was born and raised in a small island. I disliked my hometown when I was a young because there was few entertainment. I left the town when I was 18 to go to a university that was in the biggest city

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I was born and raised in a small island. I disliked my hometown when I was a young because there was few entertainment. I left the town when I was 18 to go to a university that was in the biggest city in Japan. Everything was different from my hometown. I fully enjoyed the exciting and cool city life. But for some reason, I returned the town after graduating. Then I noticed that there was beautiful nature! I would not notice it if I didn’t leave the town once.

Jan 29, 2021 9:44 PM

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I was born and raised on a small island, and I immensely disliked my hometown when I was younger because there were few places to go and very little entertainment. I left that town as quickly as I could when I was 18 to attend a university in the biggest city in Japan. As you can imagine, everything there was completely different from my hometown, and although I focused on earning my degree over the passing years, I fully enjoyed the exciting and vibrant city life that Tokyo offered. Yet, for some undefined, unexplainable and unknown reason, I eventually decided to return to my hometown soon after my graduation. Sadly, it was only then that I seemingly noticed that it was surrounded by great natural beauty, and admittedly, it was only then that I truly appreciated its simple, small-town charm. It gradually dawned upon me that had I not left it years ago for school, that had I not experienced big-city life, I probably never would have come to that subtle, but character-defining understanding.

Hi, Yuri-san. Good job! I can only trust that my poor effort maintains the feeling of pathos that you were aiming for, but my conclusion may be off. Numerous books and movies center on a similar theme, and they all remind me of Sir Isaac Newton’s quote about being “a boy playing on the seashore.” As to the grammar, it was acceptable, but improve your vocabulary so that you can create better, more descriptive sentences. Also try not to start 3 sentences in a row with the same word, especially when that word is “I.” (*-^) I hope that this helps you.

January 30, 2021

I was born and raised on a small island. I disliked my hometown when I was a young because there was little/not a lot of entertainment. I left when I was 18 to go to a university that was in the biggest city in Japan. Everything was different from my hometown. I fully enjoyed the exciting and cool city life. But for some reason, I returned to my hometown after graduating. Then I noticed how beautiful the nature here was! I would not have noticed it if I hadn’t/had never left.

Mostly grmatically correct, but English speakers would write it a bit differently.

January 29, 2021

I was born and raised in a small island. I disliked my hometown when I was young because there was little entertainment. I left the town when I was 18 to go a university that was in the biggest city in Japan. Everything was different from my hometown. I fully enjoyed the exciting and cool city life. But for some reason, I returned to my town after graduation. Then I noticed that there was this beautiful nature there! I would not have noticed it if I hadn't left the town once.

January 29, 2021

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