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The Tim じぁん!!!
In a land of sugar and sprinkle showers,
Cupcake buddies with sugary powers.
One little cupcake with a cherry on top,
Decided to flip and just wouldn't stop.
Twirling and whirling, causing a mess,
Sugar and laughter, oh, nevertheless!
Behold, the others joined in, such a sight,
Dancing and bouncing, having a bite.
In the end, all covered in goo,
Cupcake chaos but friendships grew.
A lesson they learned, so sweet and true,
Life's better shared with a cupcake crew!
Mar 26, 2024 10:31 AM
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In a land of sugar and sprinkle showers,
Cupcake buddies with sugary powers.
One little cupcake with a cherry on top,
Decided to flip and just wouldn't stop.
Twirling and whirling, causing a mess,
Sugar and laughter, oh, nevertheless!
Behold, the others joined in, such a sight,
Dancing and bouncing, having a bite.
In the end, all covered in goo,
Out of cupcake chaos friendships grew.
A lesson they learned, so sweet and true,
Life's better shared with a cupcake crew!
你好 Tim. Well done, I love it! Just a tiny suggestion with "out of..." meaning that friendships were formed from the chaos. Otherwise, I'm impressed.
March 26, 2024
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In a land of sugar and sprinkle showers, Cupcake buddies with sugary powers. One
little cupcake with a cherry on top, Decided to flip and just wouldn't stop.
Twirling and whirling, causing a mess, Sugar and laughter, oh, nevertheless!
Behold, the others joined in, such a sight, Dancing and bouncing, having a bite.
In the end, all covered in goo, Cupcake chaos but friendships grew. A lesson
they learned, so sweet and true, Life's better shared with a cupcake crew!
Great! Better than the one in the book!
March 26, 2024
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The Tim じぁん!!!
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Chinese (Mandarin), English, Japanese
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English
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