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My parents made a lot of good things when they were raising me. Firstly, I want to shed light on my parents conditions in order to you to understand situation easily. They did not have a good economical condition, so they struggled so much. Both of them had to study so hard in order to give a good education to me. I raised small family and they gave all of their interest and all suitable time to us. They were be a good examples with their behaviors.I never forget that they gave nearly all salary to support our education expenditures. I tried to emphasize that if you want to be a good person, you should take good education. This education is not only given in school, but also in family. Many scholars support this education conditions. Secondly, they send me summer camps to communicate with other people without their help. I know that they sent me there to make me social person. I know that this was an important activity which help me to be myself. In conclusion I want to say that they do their best to help me be a good person.
Jun 13, 2021 10:38 AM
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My parents did a lot of good things when they were raising me. Before going on, I want to shed light on my parents' conditions in order for you to understand. They did not have a good economical condition, so they struggled so much. Both of them had to study so hard in order to give a good education to me. I raised a small family and they gave all of their interest and time to us. They set good examples with their behavior. I never forget that they gave nearly all their salary to support our education. I tried to emphasize that if you want to be a good person, you should have good education. This education is not only given in school, but also in the family. Many scholars support this. Secondly, they send me summer camps to communicate with other people without their help. I know that they sent me there to make me sociable person. I know that this is an important activity which helps me to be myself. In conclusion, I want to say that they do their best to help me be a good person.
You have good parents!
June 13, 2021
My parents did many good things when they were raising me. Firstly, I want to shed some light on my parents circumstances in order for you you to understand the situation better. They were not well -off and as a result, they struggled. Both of them had to persevere in order to provide me with a good education. I was raised in a small family and they gave us all their time and attention (there is a high degree of Lq interference. I would suggest that instead of writing long texts such as this, you focus on precision in order to improve). They set a good example with their behaviour.I will never forget that almost all of their salaries were spent on our education (Can you see the difference in style? Also, pay attention to the use of singular and plural)) . In my opinion, if you want to be a worthy person, you need a good education (There is an issue with meaning here ... when did you try to emphasis this? You do not TAKE an education - further proof of L1) ) . This education is not only taught at school, but also at home. Many scholars support this education conditions (This is off topic and I do not understand the meaning here) . Secondly, they sent me to summer camps to make me more independent (look at how one word encapsulated the idea - independent as opposed to communicate with other people without their help). I know that they sent me there to make me more sociable / boost my social skills. I know that this was an important activity which helped me to improve. In conclusion I want to say that they did their best to help me be a good person. (Pay attention to past tense usage, singular and plurals as well as L1 interference). Good luck and happy writing.
June 14, 2021
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