can someone check its mistake help me? thanks a lot

Today, more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus people are losing the ability to communicate face to face.

To what extent do you agree and disagree?


It is argured that mobile phones and computers are being using increasinly rather than have a face to face communication. I completely agree with this idea.

There is no doubt that the developement of modern sciene and technology has helped people in many ways. Fistly, mobile phones and computers make it easier to contact with others without even meeting each other, so saving much more time for people. Secondly, mobile phones and computers are used as a mean of communication even at a long distance. For example, people is able to call each other from one country to another. Thirdly, through computers, we are easy to make new friends or partners to share common interests and interact with them without having to talk face to face.

Although the former interests of mobile phones and computers, the possibility of it lead to isolate people in the communication as well as less real interactions. For instance, many students like to befriend with virtual subjects rather than real colleage at schools.

What is more, if we communicate via mobile phones and computers many times, we are likely to loss communicaton skills such as eye-contacts and body-language expression.

In conclusion, i totally agree that the strong breakthrough of technology equipments, it make people reduce the capable of communicating face to face.

Feb 3, 2016 8:22 AM
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Nam, put it in the "Notebook" section in order to get corrected.

February 3, 2016
Thanks a lot:)
February 5, 2016