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Prompt:

Nowadays, many people go abroad either for higher education or work

do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people?
support your point of view with reasons and examples  from your own experience. 


Essay:

Every year, A large amount of youngsters choose to leave their homes to fulfill endeavors of higher education or a good career. While they choose to do so, they decide against pros and cons highly likely to affect their personal lives. I personally feel that one should pursue better opportunities wherever they await. In this essay, I will discuss further to elucidate my point of view.<o:p></o:p>

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The world today is becoming more and more competitive, because of increasing population. More to it, advancement in technology is cutting job opportunities for people, hence inducing more competition to earn a living. In this pursuit, the need to have a competitive edge has become inevitable, let alone considering the advantages. This could be in form of acquiring better education or finding a satisfactory job in better parts of the world.<o:p></o:p>

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On the contrary, it is extremely difficult for youngsters to leave behind old parents and abandoning family affairs that await them to come of age and be taken over. However, maybe we have come past of the legacy of passing the baton. Rather these young people focus on creating a life of their own, thus pursue dreams. Falling short of opportunities at home, moving abroad is the first step. There are many examples of my friends I can quote who didn't want to leave their families however lack of jobs here compelled some for opting higher education abroad and others got lucky to find good jobs. <o:p></o:p>

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In my opinion, when young people move abroad for better education or jobs, they step over the barriers and compulsions in their lives to find salvation. So it indeed proves advantageous to take this hard step, because it pays off<o:p></o:p>

May 1, 2019 4:16 PM