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online museums and galleries Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historic objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Traditionally, people have to buy a ticket and queue up if they want to see any collection exhibited in a museum or a gallery. Nowadays, however, at the click of a button, they can enter a panoramic but private visual salon from the comfort of their own home. In my opinion, such digital engagement is still unlikely to replace physical exhibition centre completely. On the one hand, virtual visit can be a viable alternative to museum-gallery-hopping. Visitors do not need to splash on an extravagant flight ticket in order to see well-renowned works on the other side of the earth. Such convenience can be attributed to the fact that a great number of (national museums) in many countries have started to display an array of collections online. Additionally, with the technology of 360-degree videos and high-definition quality, viewers can have a fairly close-up inspection on the details of those magnificent pieces. On the other hand, there are aspects of brick and mortar exhibitions that a website can not to replicate. When visiting such places in real life, visitors are more likely to immense themselves in the historical or artistic ambience within a space. On contrary, when viewing remotely, they can hardly get that feeling. Besides, online visitors lose the chance of serendipity— the sense of wandering between artworks and encountering the unexpected. They are also deprived of social opportunities. Museums and galleries are places to swap opinions and share enthusiasms. In conclusion, the viewing room is a telling indication of how creations can be shown, offering historical heritage as well as avant-garde works which we might never have access to. Nevertheless, its innate deficiencies that I have described above mean that it would be a huge loss for us if real exhibitions vanish forever. ( The most confusing thing for me about this topic is that I have no idea how to rephrase " museum and gallery" in different ways. The bracket part in the middle of this essay is one of my confusion. When I said national museum, I know it doesn't include the two objects in the question fully, but I don't know how to express.) Please help me point out the error and upgrade this essay. Thank you!
Mar 30, 2020 8:32 AM
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Online museums and galleries

Some people* claim that public museums and art galleries will no longer <s>t be</s> needed because people can now see historic objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Traditionally, people have to buy a ticket and queue up if they want to see any collection exhibited in a museum or in a gallery. Nowadays, however, at the click of a button, they can enter a panoramic, <s>but</s> private visual gallery <s>salon</s> from the comfort of their own home. In my opinion, <s>such</s> this kind of digital engagement is still unlikely to replace a physical exhibition centre completely.

On the one hand, a virtual visit can be a viable alternative to museum-gallery-hopping. Visitors do not need to <s>splash</s> splurge on an extravagant flight ticket in order to see well-renowned works on the other side of the earth. Such convenience can be attributed to the fact that a great number of (national museums) in many countries have started to display an array of collections online. Additionally, with the technology of 360-degree videos and high-definition quality, viewers can have a fairly close-up inspection <s>on the details</s> of those magnificent pieces' details.

On the other hand, there are aspects of brick and mortar exhibitions that a website cannot <s>to</s> replicate. When visiting such places in real life, visitors are more likely to <s>immense</s> immerse themselves in the historical or artistic ambiance within a space. On the other hand <s>contrary</s>, when viewing remotely, they can hardly get that same feeling. Besides, online visitors lose the chance of serendipity— the sense of wandering between artworks and encountering the unexpected. They are also deprived of social opportunities. Museums and galleries are places to swap opinions and to share enthusiasm<s>s</s>.

In conclusion, the viewing room is a telling indication on how creations can be displayed <s>shown</s>, offering historical heritage as well as avant-garde works which we might never have access to. Nevertheless, its innate deficiencies that I have described above mean that it would be a huge loss for us all if real exhibitions vanish forever.

( The most confusing thing for me about this topic is that I have no idea how to rephrase " museum and gallery" in different ways. The bracket part in the middle of this essay is <s>one</s> part of my confusion. When I said national museum, I know it doesn't include the two objects in the question fully, but I don't know how to express.)

Please help me point out the errors <s>and</s> to upgrade this essay. Thank you

*"Some people" are what we call "weasel words," meaning it's vague.

Overall, good! The difference between a "museum" and "gallery" is that the museum is the actual building that has the galleries inside. The gallery is where to go to see specific works of art on display. The museum is the complex. Thanks!
March 30, 2020
online museums and galleries

Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historic objects and works of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Traditionally, people have to buy a ticket and queue up if they want to see any collection exhibited in a museum or <s>a</s> gallery. Nowadays, however, at the click of a button, they can enter a panoramic but private visual salon from the comfort of their own home. In my opinion, such digital engagement is still unlikely to completely replace physical exhibition centres <s>completely</s>.

On <s>the</s> one hand, virtual visits can be a viable alternative to museum-gallery hopping. Visitors do not need to <s>splash</s> tack on an extravagant flight ticket in order to see well-renowned works on the other side of the earth. Such convenience can be attributed to the fact that a great number of (national museums) in many countries have started to display an array of collections online. Additionally, with the technology of 360-degree videos and high-definition quality, viewers can have a fairly close-up <s>inspection</s> view <s>on</s> of the details of those <s>magnificent </s>pieces.

On the other hand, there are aspects of brick and mortar exhibitions that a website cannot <s>to</s> replicate. When visiting such places in real life, visitors are more likely to <s>immense</s> immerse themselves in its <s>the</s> historical or artistic ambiance <s>within a space</s>. <s>On the contrary</s> (When you put 'on the contrary' here, it makes it seem like you're giving a counter argument against something you've just said. You've already established that you're giving a counterpoint to your previous paragraph, so there's no need to put it here again) Furthermore, <s>they can hardly get that feeling</s> it can be hard to achieve the same sensation when viewing from home. Besides, online visitors lose the <s>chance</s> sense of serendipity— the <s>sense</s> act of wandering between artworks and encountering the unexpected. They are also deprived of social opportunities. Museums and galleries are places to swap opinions and share enthusiasms.

In conclusion, the viewing room is a telling indication of how <s>creations</s> pieces can be shown, offering historical heritage, as well as avant-garde works <s>which</s> that <s>we</s> one might have never <s>have</s> had access to. Nevertheless, its innate deficiencies, (brief recap of deficiencies, never say I in an essay!), mean that it would be a huge loss <s>for us</s> if real exhibitions were to vanish forever.
March 30, 2020
Wow, this essay is very well written, probably even a little above my head. You had no large errors, only technical stuff, some of which even natives would make. I'm thoroughly impressed with your English abilities, keep up the great work.
March 30, 2020
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