There can be many suitable words and can change the meaning and intent of the piece.  Here's mine.

Please correct my English! ^^ (2)

Kate had been waiting for a colleague of (my, her, <someone's name>) father's to collect her from the bus station.  For more than an hourm she waited and she was getiing tired to of waiting. There was (someone) else there, and it had (been) raining. A friend of she had lent her an umbrella to take on her trip, but she (hates, did not like ) to be getting wet. Perhaps her father was angry her, she thought, or hard simply (? forgotten) to collect her. There wasn't (?) any phone-box in the bus station. Why did (things) always go wrong when she travelled by bus? (?) The bus was crowded and she felt very uncomfortable.  , or it (?)  It was stopping on and off so that and the journey lasted for hours. Suddenly she (there was) a car stopping outside. (Someone) was waving at her. It was her father!

Please correct my English! ^^ (2)

Kate had been waiting for a colleague of herfather's to collect her from the bus station for more than an hour and she was tired of waiting. There was nobody else there, and it had been raining. A friend of hers had lent her an umbrella to take on her trip, but she had gotten wet. Perhaps her father was angry at her, she thought, or had simply forgotten to collect her. There wasn't any phone-booth in the bus station. Why did it always go wrong when she travelled by bus? Whether the bus was crowded and she felt very uncomfortable, or it was stopping everywhere and the journey lasted for hours. Suddenly she saw a car stopping outside. The driver  was waving at her. It was her father!