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How to Introduce Myself When I'm in the Interview?
How do I introduce myself without using many I's?
I am 23, and has graduated from college in the last year. My major is International Trade. I haven't worked in this industy after graduating from school, but i have worked as English service [?] over one a year. Although I'm not fluent in English, I think I can talk speak and write it well. Though not fluet . I can type without watching the keyboard. I can learn new abilities fast quickly because i am I'm interested in it English and gained i have leart some knowledge of it in the college . (End the of self-introduction)
I think I need a little time to family familiarize myself with English words, but most companies won't give me a chance. I also don't have enough evidence to say "I am skillful with english writing and speaking in writing and speaking English." It's a big problem with for a lazy human person ( like me :( )
Notes and friendly suggestions~
To answer your question, you should stick in transitional words to lessen your use of 'I'. I think it's hard to refrain from using 'I' in a self-introduction because you're talking about yourself. When I introduce myself, I try to use transitional words and explain in detail about the subject to support what I said.
List of transitional words
- http://www.smart-words.org/transition-words.html
Use of transitional words
- http://www.studygs.net/wrtstr6.htm
- https://www.msu.edu/~jdowell/135/transw.html
The reason I crossed out "I can type without watching keyboard ." is because you didn't have a supporting detail for speaking. I recommend you say instead of "I can type without watching keyboard," "I can type on the keyboard in English as if it's second nature to me." <- I'd only say this if you're really fast and naturally when typing on the keyboard. Beginners in typing tend to type slow and look at the keyboard, so it's pretty impressive to say that typing is like breathing for you.
I don't think you're a lazy person. It's quite admirable that you're trying to learn English! English isn't the easiest language to learn, and even native people have a hard time with it. Your struggle is probably with grammar and not knowing enough vocabulary. I recommend you go through dictionaries to strengthen your vocabulary.
Online dictionaries
- http://www.merriam-webster.com/
- http://dictionary.reference.com/
If you ever want to use a different word with the same meaning or opposite meaning, you should use a thesaurus.
Online thesaurus
How to introduce myself when i am in the interview ?
How to introduce myself without many " i " .
I , 23 ,has graduated from college in the last year .My major is international trade .I havn't worked in this industy after school .But I have worked in the field of English service over one year .I think I can talk and write English well .Though these are not fluent . I can type without watching keyboard . I can learn a new ability fast when I am intersted in it and I have learnt some knowledge in the college . ( end the self-introduction )
I think I need a little time to organize and apply my English that I have learnt. But most company won't give me any chance .I also don't have enough evidence to say " I am skillful with English writing and speaking " . It's a big problem for a lazy human ( like me :( )
