Hello! ^^ I want to tell about me))) My name is Alena, I'm 16 years old. I'm a schoolgirl. When I'll grow up I want to be translator. I'm going to study English for my work and career. My hobbies is a

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Hello! ^^ I want to tell about me))) My name is Alena, I'm 16 years old. I'm a schoolgirl. When I'll grow up I want to be translator. I'm going to study English for my work and career. My hobbies is aquariums and dogs. I have a beautiful dog and not big aquarium with different fish. I studied English just in school. I'll glad to speak with all people =)) Add me)))

Jul 14, 2013 3:08 PM

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Hello! ^^ I want to tell you about myself)))

My name is Alena, I'm 16 years old,. I'm and a schoolgirl (try to combine several phrases using conjunctions like 'and', 'but', 'so' ...). When I'll grow up I want to be a translator, so I'm going to study English for my work and career. My hobbies is are aquariums and dogs. I have a beautiful dog and a not so big aquarium with different fish. I have only studied English just in school.

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I'll be glad to speak with anyone all people =)) Add me!!!)))

July 15, 2013

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Hello! ^^ I want to tell about me)))

My name is Alena. I'm 16 years old. I'm a schoolgirl. When I grow up, I want to be translator. I'm going to study English for my work and career. My hobbies are aquariums and dogs. I have a beautiful dog and not big aquarium with different fish. I studied English in school only. I'll glad to speak with all people [good alternative: with everyone.] =)) Add me. )))

At age 16, your written English is already very good. Congratulations to you.

July 14, 2013

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