Lately, more and more work has to be done by machines. In my opinion, I do not think that there are more merits of the phenomenon that many labors are replaced by machines than the demerits of that tr

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Lately, more and more work has to be done by machines. In my opinion, I do not think that there are more merits of the phenomenon that many labors are replaced by machines than the demerits of that trend. In this essay, I will discuss both the merits and demerits. In agriculture, the mechanism largely reduces labors required for harvesting and threshing wheat and farmers therefore have much more free time to do some leisure activities that they are too busy to do before. Also, the mass production of grain, achieved by mechanization, successfully solves the shortage of food in some poor regions and ensures the sufficient food supply in the global market. Another benefit of labor-saving machine can be seen in fields that are full of danger. In the mining of coal, for instance, miners are exposed in a dangerous environment-underground, where the concentration of gas is very high. Once the gas is leaked, workers will die. However, the labor-saving machine can eliminate the risk, at the same time; ensure the production of ore needed for industry. However, some negative effects resulted from machines cannot be ignored. Clearly, the widespread use of machine in many areas has caused a rise in rate of unemployment, especially in areas where workers do not have any specialty. Majority of those workers are uneducated and can only make a living by doing manual work. With more and more work being done by machines, our society offers fewer work opportunities for those people to earn enough money to sustain a decent life. Besides, the overstock of consumer goods can also be attributed to the large-scale mechanization and therefore large amount of packaging waste is produced, causing significant damage to our environment. It may seem that packaging and distribution of manufactured products have very little impact on the environment. However, some environmental statistics have shown that 30% of all municipal waste in U.S. come from packaging material and nearly one third of all plastics produced is used for packaging. After analyzing the benefits and adverse effects of the mechanization, I would like to conclude that people should control the use of machines to a moderate level and seek a balance between labors and machines. By doing this, not only can the advantages of machines be still kept, but the disadvantages can also be reduced to the minimum.

Jul 2, 2014 12:35 PM

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Lately, more and more work has to be done by machines.

In my opinion, I do not think that there are more merits of the phenomenon that many labors are replaced by machines than the demerits of that trend. In this essay, I will discuss both the merits and demerits.

In agriculture, the mechanism largely reduces labors required for harvesting and threshing wheat and farmers therefore have much more free time to do some leisure activities that they are were too busy to do before. Also, the mass production of grain, achieved by mechanization, successfully solves the shortage of food in some poorer regions and ensures the that sufficient food is supply supplied in to the global market.

Another benefit of labor-saving machines can be seen in fields that would be otherwise dangerous for manual labourers to work in are full of danger. In the mining of coal, for instance, miners are exposed in to a dangerous underground environment underground, where the concentration of gas is very high. Once the gas is leaked If gas was to ever leak, workers will would die. However, the labor-saving machines can eliminate the risk, whilst at the same time; ensure ensuring the production of ore needed for industry.

However, there have also been some negative effects brought into existance by the usage of machines and these cannot be ignored. some negative effects that have resulted from the usage of machines cannot be ignored. Clearly, the widespread use of machines in many areas has caused a rise in the rate of unemployment, especially in areas where workers do not have any specialty. The Mmajority of those workers are uneducated and can only make a living by doing manual work. With more and more work being done by machines, our society offers fewer work opportunities for those people who are unskilled otherwise to earn enough money to sustain a decent life.

Besides, the overstocking of consumer goods can also be attributed to the large-scale mechanization of the world and therefore a large amount of packaging, which will be wasted, is produced, causing significant damage to our environment. It may seem that packaging and distribution of manufactured products have very little impact on the environment. However, some environmental statistics have shown that 30% of all municipal waste in the U.S. comes from packaging material and nearly one third of all plastics that are produced is are used for packaging.

After analyzing the benefits and adverse effects of the mechanization, I would like to conclude that people should control the use of machines to a moderate level and seek a balance between laborers and machines. By doing this, not only can the advantages of machines be still be kept, but the disadvantages can also be reduced to the a minimum.

-Because you've already written "merits and demerits" so rencently, I would write "I will discuss both of these (things)"

-The mechanism for what - when you use a definite article you must make sure that the reader knows which mechanism you are talking about

-They were because you are talking about the past

-Using poorer is more politically correct

-Bit of an error with word order

-Machines - plural

-That are full of danger sounds childish (sorry!). It's best to use what I've written.

-In the mining of coal could be replaced by In coal mining which sounds more natural, but what you're written is just as correct.

-In English we are exposed to things

-You get environments that are underground and underground environments but neiter require a hyphen. And it's better to put the adjective before the noun

-The phrase once the gas is leaked makes it sound like some supervillan is going to leak the gas in and kill them. It's better to use what I've written.

-Machines - plural

-I've written taken out your comma and written whilst, but you could use the American while just as correctly.

-Had to restructure here, sorry.

-Machines - plural

-the rate of unemployment

-the majority

-You need a subject in this sentence - of the world

-Amounts - plural - and to be honest the whole first sentence here is just too long.

-the U.S

-labourers - the workers

-a minimum because we don't know what that will be

July 14, 2014