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The person I admire.
"One child, one teacher, one book, one pen can change the world".
This is the quote of a 17- years old schoolgirl from province of Pakistan and at the same time human rights activist, laureate of Nobel Peace Prize Malala Yousafzai. It impossible to count her achievements, she has more than 40 different awards.
Although she is only a teenager now, she has had experienced a real tragedy. In 2009, when she was 11 Malala was writing a blog for BBC, detailing her life under Taliban occupation.She also was struggling Also she struggled for girls education in her region.
On 8th of October 2012 she was attacked in school bus and was fired three shots. She was hit with one bullet, which went through her head, neck and ended in her shoulder.
While she was in coma, UN launched the petition for the rights of education for every child.
Now she is healthy and full of plans to be a politician to save for saving
Pakistan, despite of Taliban's treats to kill her anyway.
12 of July is considered Malala day, because it was her first public speech since the attack.
"Malala day is not my day. Today is the day of every woman, every boy and every girl who have raised their voice for their rights"-commented she she commented.
For our In my opinion, we should not only admire people who are brave, strong, honest and sincere, but also take for a model.
Thanks to her example we can say that it is absolutely not important who you are, how old you are, where do you live you live. Every person would be admirable, if he or she does something good for surrounding people, province, country or even for the whole world...

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The person I admire.

"One child, one teacher, one book, one pen can change the world".
This is a quote from a 17 years old schoolgirl from the province of Pakistan. She is the human rights activist and laureate of the Nobel Peace Prize, Malala Yousafzai. It is impossible to count her achievements, she has more than 40 different awards.
Although she is only teenager now, she has experienced a real tragedy. In 2009, when she was 11,  Malala was writing a blog for the BBC, detailing her life under Taliban occupation. She also fought for girls education in her region.
On the 8th of October 2012 she was attacked on the school bus and was three shots were fired. She was hit with one bullet, which went through her head, neck and ended up in her shoulder.
While she was in a coma, the UN launched a petition for the rights to an education for every child.
Now she is healthy and full of plans to be a politician to saving Pakistan, despite the Taliban's treats to kill her anyway.
12 of July is considered Malala day, because it was the day of her first public speech since the attack.
"Malala day is not my day. Today is the day of every woman, every boy and every girl who have raised their voice for their rights"- she said. 
In my opinion, we should not only admire people who are brave, strong, honest and sincere, but also see them as role models.
Thanks to her example we can say that it is absolutely not important who you are, how old you are or where do you live. Every person can be admirable, if he or she does something good for the surrounding people, province, country or even for whole world...

Could you check, please?:)

The person I admire.
"One child, one teacher, one book, one pen can change the world".
This is the quote of is from a 17 year old schoolgirl from province of Pakistan. and at the same time Human rights activist and laureate of the Nobel Peace Prize, Malala Yousafzai It impossible to count her achievements, she has more than 40 different awards.
Although she is only teenager now, she had has experienced a real tragedy. In 2009, when she was 11, Malala was writing a blog for BBC, detailing her life under Taliban occupation. Also, she struggled for girls education in her region.
On the 8th of October 2012, she was attacked in a school bus and was fired upon three times. She was hit with one bullet, which went through her head, neck and ended up in her shoulder.
While she was in a coma, the UN launched the a petition for the rights of education for every child.
Now she is healthy and full of plans to be politician for saving to save
Pakistan, despite of the Taliban's treats to kill her anyway.
12 of July July 12th is considered Malala Day, because this was the date of it was her first public speech since the attack.
"Malala Day is not my day. Today is the day of every woman, every boy and every girl who have raised their voice for their rights."-commented she.
For our  opinion, we should not only admire people who are brave, strong, honest and sincere, but take for a are also a role model.
Thanks to her example, we can say that it is absolutely not important who you are, how old you are, or where do you live. Every person would can be admirable, if he or she does something good for surrounding people others,  their province, their country or even for the whole world...

Great job and yes, this girl is very admirable. Writing suggestion: remember to use articles before nouns (the, an, a).