WILLIAM
Monkey King: Hero is Back Monkey King: Hero is Back is a really great chinese anime movie,i know japanese anime is beloved by many teens online right now,but we used to have good anime too.Osamu Tezuka was inspired by chinese anime Princess Iron Fan.but right now,all the anime we have is for kids,and their are no good adult animes for pretty long time until now,this movie is very hot in china now,i think the reason is because that he is the hero for most of us when we were kids,he's playful and powerful, a rebel,he used to battle all the gods in the heaven and all the monsters on his jouney.and now he's back. we have rich culture and writen history,we have no problem read books writen by a guy from 2000 years ago,we just don't know how to sell it like american media do.i really hope chinese culture can be loved by more people,then their won't be another kid saying monkey king is a rip off of dragon ball.
Jul 13, 2015 6:43 PM
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Monkey King: Hero is Back

Monkey King: Hero is Back is a really great Chinese anime movie, I know Japanese anime is beloved by many teens online right now, but we used to have good anime too. Osamu Tezuka was inspired by the Chinese anime Princess Iron Fan. However generally bad form to start sentences with but right now don't need a subclause here, breaks up the text too much all the anime we have is for kids, and their there are have been simple present doesn't work when talking about the movies released in the recent past no good adult animes for pretty long time until now, this movie is very hot in china now, I think the reason is because that he iswas again, past tense the hero for most of us when we were kids. He's playful and powerful, a rebel, he used to battle all the gods in the heaven and all the monsters on his journey: and now he's back.
we have rich culture and writen history, we have no problem reading the tradition and pastime of reading is continuous, 'ing' ending is necessary books writen by a guy from 2000 years ago, we just don't know how to sell it like the American media does Media is a tricky word but we usually use it as a singular noun. I really hope Chinese culture can be loved by more people, then theirthere won't be another kid saying monkey king is a rip off of dragon ball.

 

Chinese anime sounds really interesting! Three points to improve your English:

 

1. Be careful with your capitalisation (proper nouns like languages and countries need to be capitalised as well as "I")

2. Pay attention to which "there" you're using. "Their" is the 2nd person possesive plural determiner. "There" is a very common word used for all sorts of reasons, which you needed twice in this extract.
"They're" is a contraction of they are.

 

3. Break up your writing a bit, try not to have more than 2 commas in any sentence or else it can get a bit unclear. Nothing wrong with a full stop!

Good luck in your studies. 

July 13, 2015
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