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"living alone" essay It is true that in some countries an increasing number of people prefer living alone to living with family members. I believe that while this can bring some benefits to them, it can also contribute negatively to people who live such a life. It is clear that people living without family member can enjoy more freedom, own more time to do what they like and relax themselves. For technology has fasten our daily pace, people nowadays must face more stress and solve tougher problems, so having some time to relax or doing something they like can release them from those pressure. In addition, it also can make those people happier without a lot of noise. Finally, when we live alone, we can easily focus on our work or studies and work more effectively, so this can help a person achieve more in his life. Despite living alone brings positive effects on our daily life, it also has some serious effects. Firstly, family plays extremely important role a person’s life and can bring happiness and tear to a person, but these are the best memory of him. If a person lives alone, it is very hard to them to enjoy such meaningful life. In addition, people can easily feel lonely, especially when they live alone, possibly leading some serious mental illness, which can influenced a person’s life greatly. In conclusion, people can enjoy some benefits when living alone, but it also can prevent people from enjoying a meaningful life and even lead to some mental illness.
Nov 19, 2015 9:12 AM
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"living alone" essay
It is true that in some countries an increasing number of people prefer living alone to living with family members. I believe that while this can bring some benefits to them, it can also contribute negatively to people who live such a life.

It is clear that people living without any family members can enjoy more freedom and more time to do what they like and relax. Technology has hastened (quickened) our daily pace; people nowadays therefore face more stress and must solve tougher problems, so having some time to relax or doing something they like can release them from those pressure. In addition, it also can make it easier for people happier to avoid a lot of noise. Finally, when we live alone, we can easily focus on our work or studies and work more effectively, so this can help a person achieve more in life.

Despite the fact that living alone may bring positive effects in our daily life, it also may have some serious detrimental effects. Firstly, family plays extremely important role on a person’s life and can bring smile happiness and tear to a person, but these are the wonderful best memory of him. If a person lives alone, it is very hard to him or her them to enjoy such meaningful life. In addition, people can easily feel lonely, especially when they live alone, possibly leading to serious mental illness, which can greatly influence a person’s life. A rencent research shows that some mental illnesses has strong association with isolation and family can help  a person recover from such mental illnesses .

In conclusion, people can enjoy some benefits when living alone, but it also can prevent people from enjoying a meaningful life and even lead to some mental illnesses.

November 19, 2015
Rachel, Thank you very much for your corrections. I am intended to show one disadvantage of living alone, so I begin with emphasis on the importance of family life and wonderful experience in family, then if we live alone we cannot enjoy such joy. In third paragraph, I tried to point out two negative effects of living alone. Yeah, I should use more words to explain why living alone is bad to health. I will try to better this essay. Again thank you for your serious with my essay. I wish I can have more discussion about essay arrangements.
November 19, 2015
I made some corrections, assuming a formal tone. However there was one part where I could not quite understand the intent behind the words: "Firstly, family plays extremely important role a person’s life and can bring happiness and tear to a person, but these are the best memory of him. If a person lives alone, it is very hard to them to enjoy such meaningful life" The essay was grammatically fairly well done, but rhetorically, the third paragraph could use more explanation as to why living alone is detrimental to health. Best of luck with your english learning skills. You are doing great!
November 19, 2015

"living alone" essay

It is true that in some countries an increasing number of people prefer living alone to living with family members. I believe that while this can bring some benefits to them, it can also contribute negatively to people who live such a life.

It is clear that people living without any family members can enjoy more freedom and more time to do what they like and relax. Technology has hastened (quickened) our daily pace; people nowadays therefore face more stress and must solve tougher problems, so having some time to relax or doing something they like can release them from those pressure. In addition, it also can make people happier to avoid a lot of noise. Finally, when we live alone, we can easily focus on our work or studies and work more effectively, so this can help a person achieve more in life.

Despite the fact that living alone may bring positive effects in our daily life, it also may have some serious detrimental effects. Firstly, family plays extremely important role a person’s life and can bring happiness and <em>tear </em>to a person, but these are t<em>he best memory of him</em>. If a person lives alone, it is very hard to them to enjoy such meaningful life. In addition, people can easily feel lonely, especially when they live alone, possibly leading to serious mental illness, which can greatly influence a person’s life.

In conclusion, people can enjoy some benefits when living alone, but it also can prevent people from enjoying a meaningful life and even lead to some mental illness.

 

 

November 19, 2015
I know a bit English. I can't repair correct this entry but I see mean that you want to say.
November 19, 2015
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