The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20_30 years who were asked This bar chart illustrates a deliberation of young professionals aged 20_30,who were asked to state

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The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20_30 years who were asked This bar chart illustrates a deliberation of young professionals aged 20_30,who were asked to state ,which factors they thought incentive to succeed. This bar chart divide into 3 groups, which are personal feeling and external things and material things.As the graph reveals main percentage accounted for personal feelings like personal satisfaction and ambition, occupying both of them 80% and other factors rivalry ans envy and inadequate and fear of failure devote 50% ,30% ,30%,25% respectively . The second group familly and society pressure dramatically have huge percentages that 70%,60% respectively peer pressure is 45% of the people who were asked.Other factors money and desire for material things ,which are given as 45% , 50% respectively. Overall,it is clear that succes for young professionals mainly depends on self_motivating factors.

Dec 24, 2015 2:21 PM

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The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20-30 years who were asked...

This bar chart illustrates a deliberation survey of young professionals aged 20-30 who were asked to state which factors they thought provided the best incentive for success. to succeed.
This bar chart is divided into 3 groups: (You can use the colon here before the list) which are personal feelings, and external things and outside forces, and material things. As the graph reveals, personal feelings like personal satisfaction and ambition account for the largest percentage, main percentage accounted for personal feelings like personal satisfaction and ambition, occupying both of them accounting for 80%, while and other factors including rivalry, ans envy, and inadequate feelings of inadequacy, and fear of failure devote account for 50%, 30%, 30%, and 25% respectively. The second group, family and societal y pressure, dramatically have huge shows large percentages that of 70% and 60% respectively, while peer pressure is listed by 45% of the people who were asked. Other factors, money and desire for material things, which are given were reported as 45% and 50% respectively. (These two sentences illustrate putting examples within commas. The subject, "group," belongs with "shows" and "factors" belongs with "were reported." They can be made into complete sentences without "family and pressure" and "money and desire." So, "The second group shows..." and "Other factors were reported..." You simply separate the examples within the sentence by using commas.)

Overall, it is clear that success for young professionals mainly depends mainly on self-motivating factors. (You could use "self-motivation" instead of "self-motivating factors" if you want.)

January 7, 2016

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