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A Typical Discussion on Cellphone 1. If you own a cell phone, what kind of features do you have on your cellphone? Mine is a typical smart phone, which is basically a tiny personal computer. You can do the most of the things which are available on your PC, like making a new document, managing one’s schedule, using SNS, and so on. Taking pictures and videos, and playing games are necessary feature of today’s cell phones. As you all know, if you need an additional function that is not included in your phone, you can even download an application or even purchase one. It usually takes less than 2 mins. 2. How much of your cell phone usage is on activities unrelated to speaking to another person? I definitely use my cell phone for more than just talking to someone. Actually speaking to another person is not the main thing that I do with my phone. Maybe watching some interesting youtube clips, enjoying some lovely music, and looking for the cheapest flight ticket prices would be my favorite things to do with my cell phone. My opinion about Cellular Phones and the craze about its usage - If you ask any random stranger if s/he has a cellphone, you’d hardly find someone without one. Cellphones are a part of human life these days, which is not separable. Not to mention talking to someone far away, we can work more conveniently and efficiently, grab and save a bunch of memorable moments of our life in a visible way, and also enjoy our life doing things like listening to one’s favorite music, watching lately released music, and buying anything we need. It’s also true that there seems to be lots of problems caused by cellphone. But I would like to point out that those are rather caused by misuse of it, not by the cell phone itself. If someone is addicted to do any kind of stuff on his/her phone, someone should advise him to do something more valuable for his/her life. If someone talking loudly on his/her phone, with whom I really don’t like to be, then s/he’d probably have to learn more about how to act in public places. But we cannot blame the phone itself. It’s rather a matter of “education”. As a conclusion, I would say that it’s too much for us, for example, to ban the use of cellphones in certain public places. We need cell phones for better life, and the quality of our life would be advanced, just as the ultimate intention of the inventor of cellular phone. What we shouldn’t forget is that we have to learn how to use it properly, to not bother our co-worker with our phones.
Jul 25, 2016 2:25 PM
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A Typical Discussion on Cellphone

1. If you own a cell phone, what kind of features do you have on your cellphone?
Mine is a typical smart phone, which is basically a tiny personal computer. You can do the most of the things which are available on your PC, like making a new document, managing one’s schedule, using SNS, and so on. Taking pictures and videos, and playing games are necessary feature of today’s cell phones. As you all know, if you need an additional function that is not included in your phone, you can even download an application or even purchase one. It usually takes less than 2 mins.

1. Mine is a typical smart phone -->  I have a typical smartphone; basically a tiny PC.  If you write, "mine is a..." it is focusing intensely on the phone as the subject of the paragraph.  That structure is a way of personifying your phone.  Your next sentence would need to say, "It is...", not "you can".  Also, we rarely actually say "Personal Computer".  We just say PC.

2. Almost anything you can do on a most of the things which are available on your PC is also possible on a smartphone: like make writing new documents, managing your one’s schedule, using SNS, and so on. : "the most of things" --> "most things"  but available is not a good verb for this sentence.  Possible is much better.  "almost anything" is slightly more natural that "most things", but they are both fine.  

3. Taking pictures and videos and playing games are necessary features of modern cell phones.

4. As you all know, if you need an additional function that is not included on your phone, you can even download an application, normally less than a two minute process which will make that function possible or even purchase one.

  a. You should not write even...even...  

  b. If you purchase the application, you still have to download it, so you can't say, "download or purchase."


Good Work, If you have questions let me know.

July 25, 2016
Hello there First of all, sorry for my extra-long notebook entry. I'm currently practicing to express my opinion in English on various topics, and there are questions, answers, and my opinion about the topic in my notebook entry. I would appreciate your correction, especially for grammatical errors and bizarre expressions. (Which are seldom used by native English speaker.) Thanks
July 25, 2016
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