A Typical Discussion on Cellphone
1. If you own a cell phone, what kind of features do you have on your cellphone?Mine is a typical smart phone, which is basically a tiny personal computer. You can do the most of the things which are available on your PC, like making a new document, managing one’s schedule, using SNS, and so on. Taking pictures and videos, and playing games are necessary feature of today’s cell phones. As you all know, if you need an additional function that is not included in your phone, you can even download an application or even purchase one. It usually takes less than 2 mins.
1. Mine is a typical smart phone --> I have a typical smartphone; basically a tiny PC. If you write, "mine is a..." it is focusing intensely on the phone as the subject of the paragraph. That structure is a way of personifying your phone. Your next sentence would need to say, "It is...", not "you can". Also, we rarely actually say "Personal Computer". We just say PC.
2. Almost anything you can do on a most of the things which are available on your PC is also possible on a smartphone: like make writing new documents, managing your one’s schedule, using SNS, and so on. : "the most of things" --> "most things" but available is not a good verb for this sentence. Possible is much better. "almost anything" is slightly more natural that "most things", but they are both fine.
3. Taking pictures and videos and playing games are necessary features of modern cell phones.
4. As you all know, if you need an additional function that is not included on your phone, you can even download an application, normally less than a two minute process, which will make that function possible or even purchase one.
a. You should not write even...even...
b. If you purchase the application, you still have to download it, so you can't say, "download or purchase."
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