José Luis
ESSAY Write a short essay about on wheter or not sport should be a compulsory school subject. Give your opinion with reasons and arguments First of all, it is important to emphasize that nowadays school subjects have an influence on students. Everything depends on how students feel about each subject. In this essay I would like to explain how sport has a positive effect on children and why may be a compulsory school subject. Some people tend to think that, students do not need to do sport at school on account of they have the opportunity to do it in their daily life. In my case, as I consider, sport at school has several benefits. Firstly, sport is such as “break” in their daily routine. Secondly, children can improve their social skills because of sport have many positive aspects such as solidarity, work as a team, etc. Furthermore, with an increase of the social skills, should be a decrease at bullying due to when a little child plays with others is an enjoyable time for them. Therefore there is not any time to think about bullying. To sum up, I strongly believe that sport should be a compulsory school subject because there are more benefits than drawbacks and this subject is one of the most significant subjects for children nowadays. A subject which everyone loves.
Nov 26, 2016 3:57 PM
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ESSAY

Write a short essay about on wheter or not sport should be a compulsory school subject. Give your opinion with reasons and arguments

First of all, it is important to emphasize that, nowadays, school subjects have an influence on students. Everything depends on how students feel about each subject.

In this essay I would like to explain how sport have has a positive effect on children and why may it should be a compulsory school subject.

Some people tend to think that, students do not need to do any sport at school on account of that they have the opportunity to do it in their daily life.

In my case, as I consider doing any sport at school to have several benefits. Firstly, sport is such as “break” in their daily routine. Not exactly sure what you mean when you say "such as break" Secondly, children can improve their social skills because of doing a sport have has many positive aspects such as solidarity, working as a team, etc. Furthermore, with an the increase of the in social skills, there should be a decrease at in bullying due to the fact that when a little child plays with others is an enjoyable time for them. Therefore there is not any time to think about bullying.

To sum up, I strongly believe that sports should be a compulsory school subject because there are more benefits than drawbacks and this subject is one of the most significant subjects for children nowadays. A subject which everyone loves.


I can tell that you have a clear understanding of what you want to say. You know how to structure sentences, but you struggle to make the sentences flow. Some of you plural and tenses need working on slightly but most of the essay can be understood. You are clearly an advanced English writer, maybe you need more practise with sentence structures and your tense participles during tour speech. Feel free to contact me if there is any other way that I can help :)

November 26, 2016
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