Can you point out which words aren't natural and correct in my sentences? Kuihua noticed that Qingtong always likes to sit beside her and focuses his eyes on watching her writing and calculating when

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Can you point out which words aren't natural and correct in my sentences? Kuihua noticed that Qingtong always likes to sit beside her and focuses his eyes on watching her writing and calculating when she was doing homework. His eyes was filled with envies and desires. In that day, all of a sudden, she came out an idea: I want to teach my brother with literacy! This idea was like a lighting illuminating upon her heart, which makes her surprised a lot and thrilled so much. She blamed herself, “Why wouldn’t I have come up to that idea”?

Feb 14, 2022 5:41 AM

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Can you point out which words aren't natural and correct in my sentences? Kuihua noticed that her brother, Qingtong, always liked to sit beside her and focus his eyes on her writing and calculating when she was doing homework. His eyes were filled with envy and desire. That day, all of a sudden, she came up with an idea: I want to teach my brother literacy! This idea was like a light illuminating her heart, which surprised and thrilled her. She blamed herself, “Why didn't I think of it before”?

The biggest problem here was the mix of tenses. Decide whether you are writing in the past or present.

February 14, 2022

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