Good evening. I went to watch baseball with my family, but the team we support lost. I have a part-time job today. I worked 6 hours. It was raining today so I thought there weren't many customers, but

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Good evening. I went to watch baseball with my family, but the team we support lost. I have a part-time job today. I worked 6 hours. It was raining today so I thought there weren't many customers, but tere are many. Tommorow is also an 8 hours part-time job. I think I'll be more careful with my shifts next time.

Jul 1, 2023 2:39 PM

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Good evening. I went to watch baseball with my family, but the team we support lost. I had a part-time job today. I worked 6 hours. It was raining today so I thought there wouldn't be many customers but there were. Tomorrow I'll also be in an 8 hours part-time job. I think I'll be more careful with my shifts next time.

July 1, 2023

Good evening. I went to watch baseball with my family, but the team we support lost. I worked a part-time job today. I worked for 6 hours. It was raining today so I thought there weren't many customers, but there are many. Tommorow is also another 8 hour part-time job. I think I'll be more careful with my shifts next time.

These sentences are quite short so I'd like to see you join them with conjunctions or expand on them a bit. That being said, this writing style would be absolutely acceptable in a journal. Hope this helps :)

July 2, 2023

Good evening. I went to watch baseball with my family, but the team we support lost. I went to my part-time job today. I worked 6 hours. It was raining today so I thought there wouldn't be many customers, but there were. Tomorrow I will also work 8 hours at my part-time job. I think I'll be more careful with my shifts next time.

July 2, 2023

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