can you embellish my writing please I'm writing an ielts essay and this is a part of it most adults get news on social media.It is easy to understand that , on social networking sites ,if one see sth

can you embellish my writing please I'm writing an ielts essay and this is a part of it most adults get news on social media.It is easy to understand that , on social networking sites ,if one see sth ,their friends who are in their circle can also see it .With this useful feature , more and more people use social media to expand their knowledge .therefore , social network is inevitably a vehicle that take people to new horizons

Jun 23, 2017 2:40 PM

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Hi Ng, You need to fix the problems with capital letters and punctuation first. Then, check the sentences for grammar (I don't mean anything complex; just the fundamental grammar). After that, think about some synonyms for the words. Maybe you'll find something more suitable. I see several issues that you can resolve without extra help. Tell us how you go! :)

June 23, 2017

Did you really mean "embellish?" To "embellish" something means to add fancy decorations. Usually, good writing is plain and simple. I don't grade tests but I'm 90% sure that on an IELTS test, they are looking for clear, simple writing. Embellishment will not help and may hurt.

June 23, 2017

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