And here's a rewrite example (not every part I rephrased means it was wrong - I used alternate phrases liberally). In the past two years, I have toured Israel and Germany. These two counrtries are very different in many ways. First of all, the weather. Israel is drenched in sun and desertS cover a big portion of its land. Rainfall is meager throughout the year, while the winter season barely exists. In contrast, the sun in Germany seems always covered by a thick layer of clouds, and the temperature drops rapidly in early autumn and stays low until late spring. The landscapes of this cold territory is dominated by forests and the long Rhine river that winds through it. Owing to these contrasting terrestrial and climatic features, the two countries have developed distinctive diet habits. In Israel I found vegetables and fruits that I had never seen before, such as strange citruses and exotic fruits with unusual shapes. Pork is prohibited, as are horse meat and mutton. On the other hand, foods in Germany are more limited in terms of freshness. Most of them are imported, which seems to have a negative impact on its quality.

I willl mark the wrong or unnatural sounding words and phrses wrong with '*' below. In the last two years, I have traveled to Israel and Germany. These two counrtries are characterized by many differences. First of all, the weather. Israel is *the homeland of sun* (-> a country blessed with abundant sun), and *desertS cover a big *amounT (-> portion) of the area (-> land). Rainfall *are (->is) slight *over (-> through / throughout) the year and (THE) winter season seems not *be (->REMOVE) present. *On the contrary* (-> In contrast), in Germany the sun is always hidden by a thick cloud layer, and the temperature *go(->goes; ->drops) down rapidly early in autumn until late spring. In this cold territory, (THE) landscapes are (-> landscape is) dominated by *forests and the long *Reno (? Isn't it in Italy?) river go through these. Also due to these *territorials (-> terrestrial) and *climate (climatic) *contrasting (->REMOVE) features, the two countries *had (-> have) developed distinctive diet habits. In Israel I found vegetables and fruits *who (-> that) I had never seen (BEFORE), *stranger (->strange) citrus and fruits with *unusually (->unusual) shapes. Pork is prohibited, as *also (->are) horse (MEAT) and *sheep (-> mutton) . On the other hand, food in Germany is more *limitated (->limited) in terms of *fresh products* (-> freshness). Most of it is imported and it has a negative impact *to (->on) its quality...

Thank you Lovepreet :)

Dear you wrote wrong spelling of countries and one grammatical error,you wrote who to fruits.Although,who is wrong.Howeve,you have to usewhich.Otherwise,remain whole essay is correct as per my opinion.