To whom it may concern, I have some great ideas capable of attracting lots of tourists to our town. First of all, I think that creating some good events could be a magnet for the people. For example, we could organise an event where streets artists could sell their work. People love the street art and this could be a great chance also for young artists in order to increase their popularity. Obviously, in order to have a lot of people involved in our event we have to increase our public transport system. Currently the last train is at 8 pm: this is not acceptable. I think that when there will be these events, we will have to organise an all nightly ran transport”. Furthermore, if we resolve the problem about public transport, we will not have any problem with parking. Secondly, another interesting idea could be building new walking tours. In this way we could attract a lot of families. In addition, we could postpone the closing of shops and encourage night shopping. In conclusion, I think that there could be lots of great ideas to attract tourists and if we work hard we will have fantastic results. I look forward to working together, Yours faithfully, Matteo Zoccolan Nice English Matteo. If you want some feedback, there are words I would change and sentences I'd rephrase (I didn't want to completely rewrite your letter as I thought that would be rude.) One tip I can give you is sometimes less is better, a couple of times i deleted a few words just to replace it with one, you're making it harder for yourself and more convoluted. Great job either way and I hope your letter makes a difference :)

I have several great ideas capable of attracting many new tourists to our town. Principally, creating new and exciting events will act as a catalyst for more tourism. For example, organising an event whereby street artists can sell their work in a market. I believe this to be fruitful as (studies show) many people love street art, especially amongst the younger generation, whom are more likely to travel. In order to achieve such events, we need to take measures to accommodate the extra footfall through our town. At present, the last train is at 8pm which would not be feasible. A system that can allow people to travel throughout the night will need to be addressed. A positive that will arise from addressing the transport sector is that it will reduce the amount of cars on the roads. Another idea is to establish new organised walking tours, which appeals to every demographic. Also, extending the closing times of shops will attract further tourism. 👍

To whom it may concern, I have some great ideas for attracting more tourists to your town. First, I think that creating some good events could attract more people. As an example, we could organise an event where street-artists could sell their paintings. People love street-art and this could also be a great opportunity for young artists to showcase their art. Of course, in order to have a lot of people attend our event we will need to increase our public transportation system. Currently, the last train is at 8 pm, which is not acceptable. I think that when these events take place, we will have to organise an “all-night-transport”. Furthermore, if we can resolve the problem of public transportation, we likely will have less problems with parking. Secondly, another interesting idea could be building new walking tours. In this way we could also attract a lot of families. In addition, we could postpone the closing of shops and encourage “night-shopping”. In conclusion, I think that there could be lots of great ideas to attract tourists and if we work hard, we will have fantastic results. I look forward to working together, Yours faithfully, Matteo Zoccolan

Try to use ‘in order to’ a little less it can be replaced by ‘to’ to sound a little more natural but using it once or twice in a formal letter is fine

Lots of families*