Matteo Zoccolan
Would you correct my article?? Some parents teach their children at home rather than sending them to school. Is this a good or a bad thing for the children? The importance of going to school. In the past it was pretty common that parents teach their children at home rather than sending them to school. Nowadays, the importance of sending children at school is grown, since the school is even more than a place where children can build their knowledge. First of all, having parents as a teacher is not good since parents are not enough capable of teaching all subjects that are thaught at school. Moreover, children are confident with their parents so they cannot take seriously them. Secondly, the most important things that children learn at school is how to relate with other people. They build their character making friends with their schoolmates. The relationships of their childhood have a huge impact in their future. Last but not least, going to school is also an opportunity to become independent. Every school organizes every year lots of school trips that give to the children the opportunity to travel without parents and open their mind. In conclusion, I think that school years are a very important parts of everyone’s life and nothing can replace it.
Feb 16, 2021 6:26 PM
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Would you correct my article?? Some parents teach their children at home rather than sending them to school. Is this a good or a bad thing for the children? The importance of going to school. I assume the essay starts here. I am looking at this from an IELTS perspective which means you don't need a title. In the past it was pretty common that parents taught their children at home rather than sending them to school. Nowadays, the importance of sending children at school has grown, since school is even more important than simply a place where children can build their knowledge. First of all, having parents as a teacher is not good since parents are not capable enough of teaching all the subjects that are taught at school. Moreover, children are too familiar with their parents so they cannot take them seriously. Secondly, the most important thing that children learn at school is how to relate with other people. They build their characters by making friends with their schoolmates. The relationships of their childhoods have a huge impact on their futures. Last but not least, going to school is also an opportunity to become independent. Every school organizes lots of school trips every year that give children the opportunity to travel without their parents and open their minds. In conclusion, I think that school years are a very important part of everyone’s life and nothing can replace them.
Hi. The structure of this is similar to your other essays and is fine. A few words around the wrong way and some difficult plurals to get right. I do not know if you had a word limit. If you have met it this is fine, otherwise you could add some additional explanation. What happens if children don't take their parents seriously? How does making friends have an impact on their futures? What can they learn by being without their parents? Be careful with 'moreover'. Lots of learners think it is a good word but it is difficult to use properly. Overall, very good. Well done!
Feb 16, 2021 6:52 PM
Would you correct my article?? Some parents teach their children at home rather than sending them to school. Is this a good or a bad thing for the child? The importance of going to school. (do you mean ‘going to school is important’, or is this an introduction sentence?) In the past it was pretty (pretty is absolutely correct but ‘quite’ is more commonly used) common that parents taught their children at home rather than sending them to school. Nowadays, the importance of sending children to school has grown, since school is more than a place where children can build their knowledge. First of all, having parents as teachers is not good since parents are not capable enough of teaching all the subjects that are taught at schools. Moreover, children are familiar with/used to be around their parents so they cannot take them seriously. Secondly, the most important thing that children learn at school is how to relate with other people. They build their character making friends with their schoolmates. The relationships of their childhood have a huge impact on their future. Last but not least, going to school is also an opportunity to become independent. Every year, schools organise lots of school trips that give the children the opportunity to travel without parents, and open their minds. In conclusion, I think that school years are a very important part of people’s lives and nothing can replace them.
Excellent!! You’ve done a really good job here. I’m very impressed by big words like ‘moreover’-a lot of native English speakers don’t know what that word means! You have a few tiny grammar mistakes but overall great vocabulary. Well done 😊
Feb 16, 2021 6:34 PM
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Matteo Zoccolan
Language Skills
English, Italian
Learning Language
English