Recently I’ve been stressed at work pretty much. But today, I could have many chances to talk with my family and people who cares about me. I’ve got a book present from my sister-in-law, which she wan

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Recently I’ve been stressed at work pretty much. But today, I could have many chances to talk with my family and people who cares about me. I’ve got a book present from my sister-in-law, which she wanted me to cheer up by reading it. And My brother tried his best to listen and gave me some advices and also my mom and dad listened what I concern and I could also listen what’s going on in their lives. After a couple of conversations we could relieved by listening to each other and felt that we are always standing by each others. This was the good things happened for me today.

Feb 17, 2021 4:06 PM

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Recently, my work has been pretty much stressing me out. But fortunately, today, I have had many chances to talk with the members of my family and with others who care about me. My sister-in-law even got me a book, as a present, which she hoped would cheer me up after I read it. My brother also tried his best to listen and to give me some advice. Finally, my mom and dad both listened to what concerned me, too, and I could also listen to them talk about the things that are going on in their lives. After this series of conversations, we all felt much better, if not relieved, by knowing what everyone is thinking and, most importantly, by realizing that we will always support and stand by each other. These were the good things that happened to me today.

Hello. Good job! Whatever changes I made were merely to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. I hope that this helps you. As to the writing, plural nouns (family, others, people) need plural verbs (care). Only capitalize the first word in a sentence and proper nouns (“My” was neither). The word, “advice” is a mass noun, like “sand” and “ice,” and does not have a plural version. It is “each other,” or “the others,” not a mix of the two. Finally, “things” is plural, so use “these” or “those,” not the singular “this” and “that.” You should play with Luna, too, as that will reduce your stress levels.

February 18, 2021

Recently/These days, work has been stressing me out. But today, I have a chance to talk with my family and people who care about me. My sister-in-law gave me a book as a present to cheer me up. My brother tried his best to listen and gave me some advice. Also, my mom and dad listened to my concerns and I could also listen to what’s going on in their lives. After a couple of conversations we felt relieved by listening to each other and felt that we are always standing by each others. These were the good things that happened to me today.

Nice work! 👍 Just changed the word order of some sentences to make it flow better and changed some words which normally change when you use the plural (this -> these).

February 17, 2021

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