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zahra
could you please correct my writing? thank you so much
Hello everyone. hope you are doing good. I have written an english text related to a bar chart. I would appreciate it if you correct me. Thank you so much in advance

Overall, the dominance of women in physical activities was prevalent. in the age of 15 to 24 the males proportion in doing works out was higher than women but, this scenario was quite opposite in other age groups. 
In the first age group, women did less activity than men by approximately 5%. surprisingly, in the next four age groups women overshadowed men significantly. In the age of 25 till 34, the difference was about 6% and the highest difference occured in 35 to 44 where 13 percent more women did work outs. the notable differences were followed in 45to 54 and 55 to 64 by around 10% and 8% respectively. 
In the last group there was parity between men and women and and only 0.4% more women did physical activity than men. 
May 13, 2020 4:57 PM
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Hello Kevin.
Thank you so much. that's a big help. I appreciate it
May 14, 2020
Hello Zahra!

I hope the following helps. It's a first pass, and it may need some fixing up.

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Overall, the dominance of women in physical activities is prevalent in the data. In the age group of 15 to 24 there was a larger portion of males doing work outs than women, but the opposite was true in other age groups. 

In the first age group, women did less activity than men by approximately 5%. Surprisingly, in the next four age groups women overshadowed men significantly. In the age group of 25 to 34 there was a difference of approximately 6% and the highest difference occured in the 35 to 44 age range where 13 percent more women did work outs than men. The notable differences were also seen in the 45 to 54 age group and 55 to 64 age group by approximately 10% and 8% respectively.
 
In the last group there was parity between men and women and and only 0.4% more women did physical activity than men.
May 13, 2020
zahra
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