Lita
can u correct mistakes in my writing? such as: grammar, vocab, and replacing some academic words

Increasing the number of skycrapers, is a big changes in urban areas, has fundamental reasons and effects. There are several reasons for this occurrence. The most likely explanation is that increasing in massive population shows no signs of abating; hence, the cities are becoming more and more overcrowding. People want to not only seek for good jobs but also earn lots of dosh in big cities. The growth of population is rapid leading to the widening accommodations and offices. Among the most important factors cited by people is the acme of engineer and architectual achievement. Thanks to those creation, ancient buildings with low qualities are replaced by high- rise buildings. I think it is hugely important to respond the increasing population. The growth of skyscrapers has many essential effects. The benificial impact is that skyscrapers promote a fast development in the present ecomony. This means, the beauty, wealth and modernization of high- building can attrack people around the world, so bussiness has potential opportunities to develop the tourism industry, accommodation bussiness...It looks like a measuring equipment to indicate the commercial, technological, evolutionism development of cities. Nevertheless, these superstructure raise some important questions about worth the risks in cases of disater. The most important drawback is terrorism. Terrorist always set their objectives where the bulk of the population lives. Another disadvantage is the fireproofing problem. Evacuation is difficult to escape because the fire spread quickly in high- rise building. In brief, although the galloping superstructure has some advantages, it still exits nagative effects. Notably, this occurrence raises a problem that government need to consider real methods which not only improve the economy but also avoid those disaters.

Mar 12, 2015 9:02 AM
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Nevertheless, these superstructures raise some important questions about the risks included in cases of disaster. The most important drawback is terrorism. Terrorist always set their objectives where the bulk of the population lives. Another disadvantage is the fireproofing problem. *Evacuation is difficult to perform because the fire spreads faster* in high- rise buildings. In brief, although the galloping of superstructures has some advantages, it still has some negative effects as well. Notably, this occurrence raises a problem that government need to consider real methods which not only will improve the economy but also to avoid those disasters.

*Version 2: Escaping is difficult because the fire spreads faster in high rise buildings *We use faster because we have a comparison situation Fire A is spreading faster than Fire B in high rise buildings etc.

while quickly-lier we use it for = I hope my finger heals quickly. 

March 13, 2015

Increasing the number of skycrapers, is a big change in urban areas, has fundamental reasons and effects. There are several reasons for this occurrence. The most likely explanation is the increase in massive population which shows no signs of abating; hence, the cities are becoming more and more overcrowded. People want not only to seek for good jobs but also earn lots of dosh (It is a slang rarely used and i don't recommend it ;) , better say money or cash) in big cities. The growth of population is rapidly leading to the widening of accommodations and offices. Among the most important factors cited by people is the acme of engineer and architectual achievement. Thanks to those creation, ancient buildings with low qualities are replaced by high- rise buildings. I think it is hugely important to respond (not sure what you mean here but to respond where?on the issue of the increasing population. The growth of skyscrapers has many essential effects. The benificial impact is that skyscrapers promote a fast development in the present ecomony. This means, the beauty, wealth and modernization of high- building can attrack people around the world, so bussiness has potential opportunities to develop the tourism industry, accommodation bussiness...It looks like a measuring equipment to indicate the commercial, technological, evolutionism development of cities. 

March 13, 2015
Lita
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