Miss Xie
My hometown is located in the middle of nowhere village in the southern part of China. The following photos attached were taken 6 years ago. It was hot summer and the lotus were blossom. You can see all the houses are surrounded by small hills,green trees and grasses. It looks so peaceful and quiet,you can imagine the air must be very refreshing and intoxicating! My cousin in law and nephews were catching fish in the pond,which is owned by my uncle and aunt. The villagers are very hardworking and friendly,they are always busy working in the early morning or late afternoon,and take a good rest in the free time. Many of them are very excellent cook and can serve the best dishes in the world because they grow organic food by themselves. I had lots of good memories about my hometown and the people there,I think I have already run out of one minute‘s time,so I will end here!
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Sep 19, 2021 3:21 PM
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My hometown is located in the middle of nowhere - a village in the southern part of China. The attached photos were taken 6 years ago. It was a hot summer, and the lotus flowers were blossoming. You can see all the houses surrounded by small hills, green trees and grasses. It looks so peaceful and quiet,that I'm sure you can imagine the air must be very refreshing and intoxicating! My cousin in law and nephews were catching fish in the pond, which is owned by my uncle and aunt. The villagers are very hardworking and friendly. They are always busy working in the early morning or late afternoon, and take a rest in between. Many of them are very excellent cooks, and can serve the best dishes in the world because they grow organic food by themselves. I have lots of good memories about my hometown and the people there. I think I have already run out of time, so I will end here!
You could also say: the lotus plants are in blossom. And you can say: I think I have already gone over my one minute time-limit, so I will end...Please, please do remember to separate out different ideas into different sentences.
Sep 20, 2021 6:48 AM
My hometown is located in the middle of nowhere village in the southern part of China. The following photos attached were taken 6 years ago. It was hot summer and the lotus were IN blossom. You can see all the houses are surrounded by small hills,green trees and grasses. It looks so peaceful and quiet. You can imagine the air must be very refreshing and intoxicating! My cousin in law and nephews were catching fish in the pond,which is owned by my uncle and aunt. The villagers are very hardworking and friendly,They are always busy working in the early morning or late afternoon,and take a good rest in the free time. Many of them are very excellent cooks and can serve the best dishes in the world because they grow organic food by themselves. I had lots of good memories about my hometown and the people there,I think I have already run out of one minute‘s time,so I will end here!
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Sep 19, 2021 3:58 PM
1) The lotus were IN blossom 2) It looks so peaceful and quiet. You can ... (new sentence) 3) The villagers are very hardworking and friendly. They... 4) excellent cookS 5) ....about my hometown and people there. I think I.... (new sentence)
Nice story. You have 3 run-on sentences which means you put two unrelated ideas with their own sentence structure in the same sentence. They should be separated into two sentences, or you could use a semi-colon, or you could add a conjunction before the comma. Thanks.
Sep 19, 2021 3:55 PM
My hometown is located in the middle of nowhere village in the southern part of China. The following attached photos were taken 6 years ago. It was hot summer and the lotus were blossom. You can see all the houses are surrounded by small hills , green trees and grass. It looks so peaceful and quiet , you can imagine that the air must be very refreshing and intoxicating ! My cousin in law and nephews were catching fish in the pond,which is owned by my uncle and aunt. The villagers are very hardworking and friendly,they are always busy working in the early morning or late afternoon,and take a good rest in the free time. Many of them are very excellent cooks and can serve the best dishes in the world because they grow organic food by themselves. I had lots of good memories about my hometown and the people there,I think I have already run out of one minute‘s time,so I will end here!
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Sep 19, 2021 3:30 PM
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Miss Xie
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English, Japanese
Learning Language
English, Japanese