Could you do me a favour and correct the text below?
Why do you wish to study in Canada in the program for which you have been accepted?

North American Universities are all accredited in Iran, and Canada has one of the best educational systems among the most famous universities all around the world. I believe, for me it is a great opportunity to study in Canada especially in Concordia University under supervision of Prof. Suong Van Hoabecause it is an opportunity which can help meto improve the academic and practical knowledge that I need in my country to besuccessful. Furthermore,being graduated from Canada would certainlyhelp me to find a prosperous work position in my country. It definitely would be my honor to continue my studies in Mechanical Engineering (Master of Science) under supervision of Prof. Suong Van Hoa.

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Could you do me a favour and correct the text below?
Why do you wish to study in Canada in the program for which you have been accepted?

North American Universities are all accredited in Iran, and Canada has one of the best educational systems among the most famous universities all around the world. I believe, for me it is a great opportunity to study in Canada especially in Concordia University under supervision of Prof. Suong Van Hoabecause it is an opportunity which can help meto improve the academic and practical knowledge that I need in my country to besuccessful. Furthermore,being graduated from Canada would certainlyhelp me to find a prosperous work position in my country. It definitely would be my honor to continue my studies in Mechanical Engineering (Master of Science) under supervision of Prof. Suong Van Hoa.

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Why do you wish to study abroad in Canada for the program you have been accepted to?

North American universities are all accredited in Iran, and Canada has one of the most exceptional educational systems amongst the most eminent universities around the world. I believe that it is a great opportunity for me to study in Canada, especially Concordia University under the supervision of Prof. Suong Van Hoa. This gives me the convenience to help me improve my academic and practical knowledge that I need to become successful in my country. Furthermore, being a graduate from Canada would certainly aid me in finding a prosperous work position in my country as well. It would be an honor to continue my studies in Mechanical Engineering (Master of Science) under the supervision of Prof. Suong Van Hoa.

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