Ahmed Mostafa
Need Correction and rate me for Ilets Writing task 1

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

<em>Write a letter to your friend. In your letter</em>

<ul style="margin-right: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; list-style: none; padding: 0px; color: rgb(40, 40, 40); font-family: Nunito, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;"><li>give details of your study plans</li><li class="Indent1">explain why you want to get a part-time job</li><li class="Indent1">suggest how your friend could help you find a job</li></ul>

You should write at least 150 words.

My answer : 

Dear James <o:p></o:p>

I hope you are doing very well , Do you remember MBA diploma that I told you about ? I just got accepted and I’m going to USA next DEC . Now I’m really excited to meet you as soon as possible. <o:p></o:p>

I have three courses and I will spend about 4 months but I believe I will have my exams by the end of each course so I’m planning to get a very high score to apply for Business management course later .<o:p></o:p>

However the tuition are very expensive beside I’ve heard also the cost of living in USA is very high so I’m thinking about having a part time job to earn some money . <o:p></o:p>

My teacher recommended a few companies that accept a students for a part time job so I would like to send you a list of companies if you could call them to see what vacancies they have currently  .<o:p></o:p>

Best Regards<o:p></o:p>

Ahmed <o:p></o:p>

Apr 20, 2019 8:37 PM
Comments · 3
For receiving corrections, you should post your text here: https://www.italki.com/notebooks

This is a post explaining how to use the notebook section: https://www.italki.com/discussion/204748

April 20, 2019

You can delete the text that you wrote but you cannot delete the title.
Anyway, there is no need to delete what you wrote, but Miriam is right, the proper place for your writing is in the Notebook section.

Note: IELTS [NOT Ilets]

April 20, 2019
Thanks Miriam , I created a notebook instead but i don't know how to delete this discussion 
April 20, 2019