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the nightmare about the monsters at the last night, my grandmother told me about a monster story. when i hearing it, i thought the story was stupid and the monster didn't exist. but when i was sleeping, i had a nightmare about the monsters. in the nightmare, it was a warm day and i was staying in the flower garden. then, i met a handsome boy and we talked about the monsters we knew. and i thought that " what a nice dream" but i was wrong. suddenly, he tranformed into a giant monster and howled a loud sound. he looked like something between a horse and a hound. i was really terrified. at the exact moment, i wondered he woudl kill me, wouldn't he and i guessed the answer was "yes, he wuold kill me if i didn't ran the fastest possible" so i decided to run as fast as i cuold until i reached the high cliff. in front of me was high cliff and behind me was the scary monster so i was afraid. immediately, he stood in front of me and pushed me dowm the cliff. then i waked up and i felt hurt all over body because i fell from the bed while i was sleeping. i was realy relieved to know it was just a dream. what a terrifying dream!! but anyway, nightmare or sweet dream is also dream so i don't scary it.
Aug 27, 2019 7:33 AM
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Have a nice day!!! Thanks for pointing out my mistake.
August 27, 2019
Last night my grandmother told me a monster story. When I heard it, I thought the story was stupid and that the monster didn't exist but when I was sleeping I had a nightmare about monsters. In the nightmare, it was a warm day and I was resting in a flower garden. Then I met a handsome boy and we talked about monsters we knew. I thought "what a nice dream" but I was wrong. Suddenly, he transformed into a giant monster and howled loudly. He looked like something between a horse and a hound. I was really terrified. At that exact moment, I wondered if he would kill me and I guess the answer was "yes, he will kill me if I don't run away as fast as possible." So I decided to run away as fast as I could until I reached a high cliff. In front of me was the high cliff and behind me was the scary monster so I was afraid. Suddenly he stood in front of me and pushed me over the cliff. Then I woke up and it felt like my whole body was injured as if I had fallen out of bed when I was sleeping. I was really relieved to know it was just a dream. What a terrifying dream! But anyway, whether you have a nightmare or a sweet dream, they are just dreams so I don't get scared about them.
August 27, 2019
Good day! Good work with this paragraph! I'd like to give you some suggestions, but there are some basic things that you need to fix first. Capitalize the first word of every sentence (after every period). When you talk about the pronoun "I" it is always capitalized. Spelling of WOULD and COULD. Let me know when you have repaired those few things and I can give you some other suggestions about your writing in English. Well done!
August 27, 2019
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