The loss of our privacy
The article exposes one of the main problems of our modern society, and it is none other than, the loss of our privacy. This big issue goes hand in hand with the fact of companies trying to make apps look as indispensable for us, and being conscious that almost nobody reads the privacy policy that accepts when installing them. Therefore, it is in our hands to start changing our conduct towards something so precious as our intimate life.
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Muchas gracias, Winnie. :)
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The article exposes one of the main problems of our modern society: NONE other than(REMOVE COMMA,) the loss of our privacy. This big issue goes hand in hand with the fact THAT companies ARE trying to make apps SEEM indispensable, and THAT that almost nobody reads the privacy policy (REMOVE: that accepts) when installing them. Therefore (REMOVE COMMA,) it is UP TO US TO to start changing our conduct towards something so precious as our PRIVACY.
I made some tweaks, some of which are stylistic more than anything else. Hope this helps.
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