A paragraph about the "Role of Computers in Our Lives". Part1. Could you please correct my notes? Could you please help me ans correct my notes? Thanks in advance. Firstly, there is not a shadow

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A paragraph about the "Role of Computers in Our Lives". Part1. Could you please correct my notes? Could you please help me ans correct my notes? Thanks in advance. Firstly, there is not a shadow of a doubt that after post-industrial era, an ever-increasing number of people are involved in working with computers. A study has shown that every student in various university fields should pass at least one course regarding computer science, and thus universities not only raise students' awareness of computer realms, but also broaden their horizons, and expand their knowledge about computers. Secondly, all of us are living in a modern society which makes us have relevant computer knowledge. Furthermore, different job opportunities in society require having rudimentary skills about computers, so if we do not know how to work with computers, we cannot find any jobs to make a living.

Feb 20, 2013 2:05 PM

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A paragraph about the "Role of Computers in Our Lives". Part1. Could you please correct my notes?

Could you please help me ans correct my notes? Thanks in advance.

Firstly, there is (not a shadow of a) no doubt that after the post-industrial era, an ever-increasing number of people are involved in (working with) the computing field/the field of computing (computers). A study has shown that every student in various all university fields courses should pass at least one course regarding computer science, and thus so that universities not only raise students' awareness of computer use realms, but also broadens their horizons, and expands their knowledge about computers.

Secondly, all of us are living in a modern society which requires us to have some makes us have relevant computer knowledge. Furthermore, different many job opportunities in society require that we have having rudimentary skills about computers, so if we do not know how to work with computers, we cannot shall struggle to find any a jobs to and will be unable to make a living.

Keep up the hard work Sarah, well done on a challenging piece of work!

February 20, 2013

Hey Bud. Your university major is related to computers, right? I forgot, are you a software engineer? Hmmmmm, that is our life. I think we are addicted to computers. :D But you are right. I really miss the time I played with my cousins in my grandma's house. We used to play different games. That was amazing! You made me recall about my past. :)

February 20, 2013

Its not that far, we used to sit along with family, play a lot of games together, there was an hour fixed at prime time for watching TV. In morning we used to play in playgrounds like Cricket, football, volleyball and etc. I personally was a good student before the introduction of computer to my life, and I really really really miss that life.

February 20, 2013