Imagine you could change places with another person for a whole day.

If I could change places with another person for a day, I would change with my cousin because she is a very interesting woman. She is a manager in an important, multinational company, and she travels a lot around the world a lot. She is very pretty and elegant, also she earns enough money to have a confortable comfortable life.
She is very extroverted and sociable, so people enjoy spending time with her.
If I would could be her for a day, I would travel to New York, and I would eat in go to a good nice restaurant, visit a museum and go to the theatre.  aAfter that, I would go shopping and buy beautiful clothes, the same style as what she wears she does.
I would have meetings with important impresarios business,and I could meet famous people.

However I would like to be her only for a day because she pass spends a lot of time far away to from her family, and sometimes, she doesn't see her children during for a week at a time because of her travels. she have to be in another place far her home, aAlso she has got a very stupid husband, (yikes!) and I would not like to spend pass more than one day with him.
Sometimes I think have thought perhaps she would like to change places with me.

Please, Could someone correct me?. This is a homework assignment from language school.

Very good overall.  Sounds like an ambitious day!

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Imagine you could change places with another person for a whole day.

If I could change places with another person for a day I would change with my cousin, because she is a very interesting woman. She is a manager in an important multinational company, and she travels a lot around the world. She is very pretty and elegant, and she earns enough money to have a comfortable life.

She is very extroverted and sociable, so people enjoy being with her.

If I could be her for a day I would travel to New York, where I would eat in a good restaurant, visit museums and go to the theatre. Afterward, I would go shopping and buy beautiful clothes like she does. I would have meetings with important impresarios, and I could meet famous people.

However, I would like to be her only for a day, because she spends a lot of time far away from her family. Sometimes, she doesn't see her children during the week because she has to be in another place far from her home. Also, she has got a very stupid husband, and I would not like to spend more than one day with him.

Sometimes I have thought that perhaps she would like to change places with me.

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Imagine you could change places with another person for a whole day.

If I could change places with another person for a day I would change places with my cousin, because she is a very interesting woman.  She is a manager in an important multinational company and she travels a lot around all over the world. She is very pretty and elegant also and she earns enough money to have a comfortable life.
She is very extroverted and sociable, so people enjoy being with her.
If I could be her for a day I would travel to New York and I would eat in a good restaurant, visit a museum, and go to the theatre, after and then I would go shopping and buy beautiful clothes like the same she does.
I would have meetings with important impresarios and I could meet famous people.

However, I would like to be her only for a day because she pass spends a lot of time far away to from her family. and Sometimes, she doesn't see her children during for a week because she have has to be away from in another place far her home. Also she has got a very stupid husband and I would not like to pass spend more than one day with him.
Sometimes I have thought, perhaps she would like to change places with me.

Please, Could someone correct me?. This is a homework from  my language school.

Bien escrito. Dime si tu hermana se cansa de su marido, y si se interesa en un norteamericano.