WRITING of IELTS _Celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth is good or not? Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets

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WRITING of IELTS _Celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth is good or not? Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Recently, in order to catch more attention from public, celebrities are frequently showing their luxury life and dedicated appearance to people, which makes some people think it is a negative model to young generation. Personally, I disagree with this view. In fact, with deeply thinking, these behaviors can be us understood. Due to the identity of their job, to amuse and attract the eyes from the people are a part of their job, so they would like to figure out some uncommon ways to make people notice them, then they can still make people feel fresh about them and develop their fame in public. In addition, because of a lot of efforts they have paid, to sharp their body and perfect their appearance, they deserve to be known and get those pricy stuff that those can be one of the evidences of their striving to let people know that if you want to have a high quality of life, every individual should try their best to fulfill it. Obviously, there still are some side-effects of these behaviors. For instance, owing lots of focuses attracted, it will mislead those naive and green youngster’s awareness that to let them focus on these superficial aspects and consider them as the most important thing in the value of life, while neglecting to boost their abilities and enhance their knowledge is the best way to gain a fantastic life. Overall, everyone born to be equal, this means that the celebrity still has the right to post their life to the people. If it is legal, why will we refuse to appreciate and understand other’s efforts?

May 8, 2014 10:01 AM

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WRITING of IELTS _Celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth is good or not?

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Recently, in order to catch more attention from public, celebrities are frequently showing their luxury life and dedicated appearance to people, which makes some people think it is a negative model to young generation. Personally, I disagree with this view.

In fact, with deeply thinking, these behaviors can be us understood. Due to the identity of their job, to amuse and attract the eyes from the people are a part of their job, so they would like to figure out some uncommon ways to make people notice them, then they can still make people feel fresh about them and develop their fame in public. In addition, because of a lot of efforts they have paid, to sharp their body and perfect their appearance, they deserve to be known and get those pricy stuff that those can be one of the evidences of their striving to let people know that if you want to have a high quality of life, every individual should try their best to fulfill it.

Obviously, there still are some side-effects of these behaviors. For instance, owing lots of focuses attracted, it will mislead those naive and green youngster’s awareness that to let them focus on these superficial aspects and consider them as the most important thing in the value of life, while neglecting to boost their abilities and enhance their knowledge is the best way to gain a fantastic life.

Overall, everyone born to be equal, this means that the celebrity still has the right to post their life to the people. If it is legal, why will we refuse to appreciate and understand other’s efforts?

Phillips correction

Recently, in order to catch more attention from the public, celebrities are frequently showing their luxurious lifestyle and dedicated appearance to people, which makes some people think it is a negative model for the young generation. Personally, I disagree with this view.

In fact, with deep thinking, these behaviors can be understood by us. Due to the identity of their job, to amuse and attract the eyes from the people, so they would like to figure out some uncommon ways to make people notice them, then they can still refresh peoples feelings about them and develop their fame in public. In addition, because they have made a lot of effort to sharpen their body and perfect their appearance, they deserve to be known and attain those expensive things that can be evidence of their achievement, to let people know that if you want to have a high quality of life, every individual should work hard to fulfill it.

Obviously, there still are some side-effects of these behaviors. For instance, owing to lots of attracted focus, it will mislead naive and green youngster’s to focus on these superficial aspects and consider them as the most important thing in life, while neglecting to realize that boosting their abilities and enhancing their knowledge is the best way to gain a fantastic life.

Overall, as everyone is born to be equal, this means that the celebrity still has the right to advertise their lifestyle to the people. If it is legal, why refuse to appreciate and understand other’s efforts?

June 19, 2014

WRITING of IELTS _Celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth is good or not?

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Recently, in order to catch more attention from public, celebrities are frequently showing their luxury life and dedicated appearance to people, which makes some people think it is a negative model to young generation. Personally, I disagree with this view.

In fact, with deeply thinking, these behaviors can be us understood. Due to the identity of their job, to amuse and attract the eyes from the people are a part of their job, so they would like to figure out some uncommon ways to make people notice them, then they can still make people feel fresh about them and develop their fame in public. In addition, because of a lot of efforts they have paid, to sharp their body and perfect their appearance, they deserve to be known and get those pricy stuff that those can be one of the evidences of their striving to let people know that if you want to have a high quality of life, every individual should try their best to fulfill it.

Obviously, there still are some side-effects of these behaviors. For instance, owing lots of focuses attracted, it will mislead those naive and green youngster’s awareness that to let them focus on these superficial aspects and consider them as the most important thing in the value of life, while neglecting to boost their abilities and enhance their knowledge is the best way to gain a fantastic life.

Overall, everyone born to be equal, this means that the celebrity still has the right to post their life to the people. If it is legal, why will we refuse to appreciate and understand other’s efforts?

Phillips go -

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Celebrity in today's society has increasingly become a diluted ideology, today certain types of celebrity are glorified, and others 'swept beneath the carpet'.

In the past 'celebrity' icons would include famous scientists and doctors, philosophers and other varying academics, in complete conjecture to today's society, where celebrity worship borders on the vulgar, idiocy and benign, purposefully 'low brow', culture is propagated by main stream media.

But this raises the question of who is to blame? Do we cast our eyes upon the media, and blame them for championing such role models to the people, should 'People magazine' focus less on Kim Kardashians wedding and more on potential noble peace prize winners? Would the common man pay a seconds interest if they did?

It is inevitable that youth culture will seek to follow the trends set for them by modern media, and if modern media propagates the moronic celebrity rather than the academic 'high-roller' then that is what the youth of today's society will emulate. This is what one might refer to as a classic case of a 'vicious circle' - the media shows the conventional 'plastic, fantastic' celebrity, the youth emulate, later becoming the next generation and the cycle repeats itself. To be broken, there must be a paradigm shift, from either the media or youth culture, away from mindless celebrity worship, purely due to their riches and glamor, and towards a heightened sense of intellectual interest.

In short, the youth will always follow what is broadcast to them, the broadcasters will always show what they believe the youth to be interested in. And so long as both idolize the glamorous and rich lifestyle, rather than that of the ascetic, intellectual, societal renunciate, the paradigm will remain ingrained in our culture for as long as one might dare imagine,

June 5, 2014

Celebrity in today's society has increasingly become a diluted ideology, today certain types of celebrity are glorified, and others 'swept beneath the carpet'. In the past 'celebrity' icons would include famous scientists and doctors, philosophers and other varying academics, in complete conjecture to today's society, where celebrity worship borders on the vulgar, idiocy and benign, purposefully 'low brow', culture is propagated by main stream media. But this raises the question of who is to blame? Do we cast our eyes upon the media, and blame them for championing such role models to the people, should 'People magazine' focus less on Kim Kardashians wedding and more on potential noble peace prize winners? Would the common man pay a seconds interest if they did? It is inevitable that youth culture will seek to follow the trends set for them by modern media, and if modern media propagates the moronic celebrity rather than the academic 'high-roller' then that is what the youth of today's society will emulate. This is what one might refer to as a classic case of a 'vicious circle' - the media shows the conventional 'plastic, fantastic' celebrity, the youth emulate, later becoming the next generation and the cycle repeats itself. To be broken, there must be a paradigm shift, from either the media or youth culture, away from mindless celebrity worship, purely due to their riches and glamor, and towards a heightened sense of intellectual interest. In short, the youth will always follow what is broadcast to them, the broadcasters will always show what they believe the youth to be interested in. And so long as both idolize the glamorous and rich lifestyle, rather than that of the ascetic, intellectual, societal renunciate, the paradigm will remain ingrained in our culture for as long as one might dare imagine,

June 5, 2014

Recently, in order to catch more attention from the public, celebrities are frequently showing their luxurious lifestyle and dedicated appearance to people, which makes some people think it is a negative model for the young generation. Personally, I disagree with this view. In fact, with deep thinking, these behaviors can be understood by us. Due to the identity of their job, to amuse and attract the eyes from the people, so they would like to figure out some uncommon ways to make people notice them, then they can still refresh peoples feelings about them and develop their fame in public. In addition, because they have made a lot of effort to sharpen their body and perfect their appearance, they deserve to be known and attain those expensive things that can be evidence of their achievement, to let people know that if you want to have a high quality of life, every individual should work hard to fulfill it. Obviously, there still are some side-effects of these behaviors. For instance, owing to lots of attracted focus, it will mislead naive and green youngster’s to focus on these superficial aspects and consider them as the most important thing in life, while neglecting to realize that boosting their abilities and enhancing their knowledge is the best way to gain a fantastic life. Overall, as everyone is born to be equal, this means that the celebrity still has the right to advertise their lifestyle to the people. If it is legal, why refuse to appreciate and understand other’s efforts?

June 5, 2014

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