In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes? Topic: In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the c

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In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes? Topic: In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes? How to solve this problem? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- My essay: In recent few years, there is increasing trend for the crime rates of youth in some regions, which trigger great concern by the public. This essay will discuss the reasons for this problem and provide some possible solutions. First, there is a close connection between those underage criminals and their family education. The fast-paced lifestyles often make parents forget them to fulfill their responsibilities for their children’s education. The children who lack parental guidance usually have an incorrect understanding of their own faults and will pose a huge hazard to their future development. Besides, the unfair treatment comes from teachers is another reason which is involved in this issue. It is a common thing for some teachers to favor those students who often achieve high scores in tests. For the rest of students, their feelings and emotions are usually been ignored by their teachers. This inequity aggravates their discontent and finally leads more youth into criminal behavior. In addition, parts of the media should be responsible for this problem. The frequent violent and horrible scenes have a great negative impact on the growth of children and sometimes they will imitate the atrocities unconsciously. In order to reverse this situation, there are several possible approaches. Firstly, even though most parents are busy with their work, they should manage to put aside some time to keep their children company and strengthen their children’s education. Secondly, schools should set up regulations to minimize the inequity. The assessments of children should be included in the educational system as one factor to assess the performance of teachers. Lastly, the government should restrict the frequency of violent scenes and provide a healthy environment for children. Only by those approaches can we reduce the risk of juvenile delinquency to the greatest extent.

Jun 14, 2015 3:38 PM

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In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes?

Topic: In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes, what are the causes? How to solve this problem?
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My essay:
In recent few years, there is an increasing trend for the crime rates of youth in some regions, which triggers great concern from the public. This essay will discuss the reasons for this problem and provide some possible solutions.

First, there is a close connection between those underage criminals and their family's education. The Fast-paced lifestyles often make parents forget them to fulfill their responsibilities for their children’s education. The children who lack parental guidance usually have an incorrect understanding of their own faults and will this poses a huge hazard to their future development.

Besides, the unfair treatment coming from teachers is another reason which isinvolved in this issue(sounds funny maybe try: source of the problem or reason for the issue) . It is a common thing for some teachers to favor those students score well on who often achieve high scores in tests. For the rest of students, their struggles and emotions are usually been ignored by their teachers. This inequity aggravates their discontent and finally leads more youth into criminal behavior.

In addition, parts of the media should be held responsible for this problem. The frequent violent and horrible scenes have a great negative impact on the growth of children. and Sometimes children will even imitate the atrocities unconsciously.

In order to reverse improve this situation, there are several possible approaches. Firstly, even though most parents are busy with their work, they should manage to put aside some time to keep their children company and strengthen their children’s education. Secondly, schools should set up regulations to minimize the inequity. The assessments (Do you mean their exams? Assessments is unclear to me.) of children should be included in the educational system as one factor to assess the performance of teachers. Lastly, the government should restrict the frequency of violent scenes in the media and provide a healthy environment for children. Only through these approaches can we reduce the risk of juvenile delinquency to the greatest extent.

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Well done, your vocabulary use and grammar are excellent. A lot of my corrections are just to make it flow better and not so much about their correctness :)

June 14, 2015

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