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Patri Alv F
Family Life I’m going to write about my family. I have a big family and it makes me feel so lucky. I have two brother, one is the oldest (Carlos) and other the youngest (Ricardo). I’m the middle child. Two boys and only a girl… You can imagine! Our childhood was an adventure. We passed great times together but, we sometimes wanted killing each other. In the childhood’s home, we shared the same bedroom for a long time. The house wasn’t a big house and my two brothers and I slept in the same room. My friend Tara always said: “Your home seems New Year’s Eve every day!” Nowadays, the situation is so different. Carlos moved to Madrid a few months ago and Ricardo and I lived with our parents in the island. We cannot see us like we want, but we stay in contact by WhatsApp every day. I don’t change nothing in my childhood. It was amazing thankful to my brothers. They taught me a lot and they are there when I always need. I think this is the most important thing.
Jan 25, 2016 7:22 PM
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Family Life

I’m going to write about my family. I have a big family and it makes me feel so lucky. I have two brothers, one is the eldest (Carlos) and other is the youngest (Ricardo). I’m the middle child. Two boys and only a girl… You can imagine!
Our childhood was an adventure. We passed great times together but, we sometimes wanted killing to kill each other. In the childhood’s my childhood home, we shared the same bedroom for a long time. The house wasn’t a big house and my two brothers and I slept in the same room. My friend Tara always said: “Your home seems like New Year’s Eve every day!”
Nowadays, the situation is so different. Carlos moved to Madrid a few months ago and Ricardo and I lived live with our parents in on the island. We cannot see us him like we want, but we stay in contact by WhatsApp every day.
I don’t wouldn't change nothing anything in my childhood. It was amazing thankful thanks to my brothers. They taught me a lot and they are always there when I always need them. I think this is the most important thing.

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Comments: In some instances, your English was understandable but I edited for a more natural flow, such as the part about your house not being big and your brothers being there for you. Overall this was very good writing!

January 25, 2016
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