The BenJing of the weather I live in BenJing，It is snowing on this Monday，So these days the weather is very freezing，But the air quality is very good.Although It is a fine day today,but the temperatur

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Claire

The BenJing of the weather I live in BenJing，It is snowing on this Monday，So these days the weather is very freezing，But the air quality is very good.Although It is a fine day today,but the temperature is very low,The sky is blue，there are some clouds in the sky.No smog.When you go out without wearing a face mask.

Nov 23, 2016 4:30 AM

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The BenJing of the weather here in Beijing(Peking)

I live in BenJing，It is We just had a large snow in Beijing city where I lived on this Monday, So these days the weather it is very freezing, But but the air quality is very good though. Although It is a fine day today, but the temperature is very low. The sky is blue,There are some clouds in the sky which is very blue, and there's no pollution haze. that's why When we can go out without wearing a face mask.

Add a space after every comma or full stop, correct me if my correction is not correct.

每一个逗号或句号后面要空格，如修改有误，请指正。

November 23, 2016

The BenJing of the weather

I live in BenJing，It is snowing on this Monday，So these days the weather is very freezing，But the air quality is very good.Although It is a fine day today,but the temperature is very low,The sky is blue，there are some clouds in the sky.No smog.When you go out without wearing a face mask.

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The Weather in BenJing

I live in BenJin. Today is a fine day with a blue sky, some clouds and a low temperature. It is Monday, snowing and the weather is freezing. The air quality is very good, with no smog, when you go out without wearing a face mask.

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You write good ... keep up the good work !

Try to join similar verbs and nouns into one slightly longer smooth flowing sentence and do not be afraid to shorten a sentence if it is longer than needed either.

I moved sentences around for better introduction sequence as well.

Robin :-)

November 23, 2016

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