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Your English teacher has asked you to write a story. Your story must have the title: A Family Celebration
Last saturday, whole my family celebrated the birthday of my brother. My parents did him a surprise party in a boat near of a beach in Mogan with his friends and family.
We have been organizing this party for several weeks. We had rented a boat because my brother loves the sea. Also, we had bought a lot of food and drinks, and I decided to hire to his favourite musical band called Sunset.
It was a amazing birthday party. When he arrived to boat, he was very happy and grateful with us. Besides, his friends gave him a wonderful present to enjoy it with his girlfriend.
All in all, we enjoyed of a day in family although my parents spent a lot of money in this party. However, they had fun dancing with my family for whole afternoon.
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Can you correct my mistakes please?
Your English teacher has asked you to write a story. Your story must have the title: A Family CelebrationLast saturday, whole my my whole family celebrated the birthday of my brother. My parents did threw him a surprise party in a boat near of a beach in Mogan with his friends and family.
We have been organizing this party for several weeks. We had rented a boat because my brother loves the sea. Also, we had bought a lot of food and drinks, and I decided to hire to his favourite musical band called Sunset.
It was a an amazing birthday party. When he arrived to the boat, he was very happy and grateful with for us. Besides, his friends gave him a wonderful present to enjoy of enjoying it with his girlfriend.
All in all, we enjoyed of a day in family a day of family although my parents spent a lot of money in on this party. However, they had fun dancing with my family for the whole afternoon.
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Can you correct my mistakes please?
Your English teacher has asked you to write a story. Your story must have the title: A Family CelebrationLast saturday, my whole my family celebrated the my brother's birthday of my brother. My parents threw him a surprise party in a boat near of a beach in Mogan with his friends and family.
We have been organizing this party for several weeks. We had rented a boat because my brother loves the sea. Also, we had bought a lot of food and drinks, and I decided to hire to his favourite musical band: Sunset.
It was an amazing birthday party. When he arrived on the boat, he was very happy and grateful with us. Besides, his friends gave him a wonderful present to enjoy it with his girlfriend.
All in all, we enjoyed of a day in with our family although my parents spent a lot of money on this party. However, they had fun dancing with (the rest of) my family for the whole afternoon.
This should be all, I think.
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Ok Carter, muchas gracias por tu aclaración.
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En ingles, "hacer una fiesta" es "to throw a party". No decimos "to make a party", sino "to throw a party". Es una expresión. Espero que eso puede ayudar.
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