The day I met my hero. Essay of story I never thought that someday I would meet my hero. It was at night. I got out of the bus and I began to walk along the street. Nobody was there. Suddenly, three y

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The day I met my hero. Essay of story I never thought that someday I would meet my hero. It was at night. I got out of the bus and I began to walk along the street. Nobody was there. Suddenly, three young people surrounded me. One of them said that I must give them the money. Poor young man. He was wrong. I wasn't carrying on any coin. The other couple of young people took off a knife from the pocket. They showed me it. But I wasn't afraid. I only was looking at their faces. Any scream, any word. But, immediately, a tall man appeared close to me. He was in front of those young people. He didn't say anything, but he took off a gun. The young people ran away quickly. And the tall man disappeared. He was my hero. He saved me.

Apr 17, 2019 7:42 PM

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*** Woah! Intense story. The saying goes 'never bring a knife to a gunfight' You could embellish your story with the man saying that :)

*** Brandishing is to display a weapon in a threatening manner.

*** Not sure what 'Any scream, any word.' means. I assume you mean 'i did not scream or say a word'.

The day I met my hero. Essay of story

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April 17, 2019

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