Hi Joss, This is a wonderful piece and i have made just a few corrections to make it flow better. I invite you to visit my profile and see what I offer if you are interested in learning more. Great job and hope to see you soon. When I was in high school, I used to get up at 9:00 in the morning, I had breakfast, I took a shower and got ready to go to school. The high school was far away from my home, so, I took a taxi to get there. I was really happy. I had a lot of friends and we had so much fun. My friends and I used to skip the last classes and we used to go to my house to watch movies and eat some snacks. Also, I used to play basketball on the weekends, I was the team captain. I remember when I was in the InterCobaev we played against another city and I scored a perfect basket of three points, I was so excited, we won that game and we got to the finals. The next day was the expected day, the finals. The other team was very strong and they had never lost a tournament. It was a very close game but unfortunately, we lost the game and when the game was finished our club stood up and applauded for us because our high school team had never come this far. This was the best day for me in high school.

When I was in high school, I used to get up at nine o’clock in the morning. I had the breakfast, took a shower and got ready to go to school. The high school was far away from my home, so I took a taxi to get there. I was really happy! I had a lot of friends and we had a lot of fun! My friends and I used to skip our last class and go to my house to watch movies and eat snacks. I also used to play basketball on the weekends and I was the team captain. I remember when I was in the Inter Cobaev, we played against another city and I scored a perfect basket of three points! I was so excited! We won that game and we got to the finals! The next day was the big game and the other team was very strong. They had never lost a tournament. It was an extremely close game, but unfortunately, we lost. When the game was finished our club stood up and applauded for us because our high school team had never come this far. This was the best day for me in high school.

Here are some more advanced comments. When I was in high school, I got up... or “would get up”. “Used to” isn’t the best tense. My friends and I would skip our last class ... We would never say “I scored a perfect basket of three points” I don’t know what you mean. Maybe you mean “I scored a three-pointer” or “I scored a three-point swish” (“swish” means the ball doesn’t touch the rim or backboard) We won that day and reached the finals. You use both “club” and “school” to describe your team. In the US these are two separate things. Your meaning is unclear to me. More natural is something like “This is my favorite high school memory.” “That was the happiest day of my years in high school”

I changed a few things to make the writing better. Very nicely done! When I was in high school, I used to get up at nine o’clock in the morning. I had the breakfast, took a shower and got ready to go to school. The high school was far away from my home, so I took a taxi to get there. I was really happy! I had a lot of friends and we had a lot of fun! My friends and I used to skip our last class and go to my house to watch movies and eat snacks. I also used to play basketball on the weekends and I was the team captain. I remember when I was in the Inter Cobaev, we played against another city and I scored a perfect basket of three points! I was so excited! We won that game and we got to the finals! The next day was the big game and the other team was very strong. They had never lost a tournament. It was an extremely close game, but unfortunately, we lost. When the game was finished our club stood up and applauded for us because our high school team had never come this far. This was the best day for me in high school.