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I would be very happy if someone can correct it for me :)
A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What
do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your
town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your
essay.
I live in Jerusalem in the last few years. In my opinion, Jerusalem has many advantages, but has also some disadvantages. If a person I know moved to Jerusalem, I think he would like the restaurants and the variety of cultures here. The thing that he will not like so much is the traffic jam.
Jerusalem has many good restaurants. The restaurants are from many different types. There are restaurants that offer oriental food, while others that specialized in western food. For example, in the old city of Jerusalem there is a little restaurant that I like the most. This restaurant offers only one kind of food, hummus. This restaurant is very small, only five or six persons can seat there in one time. I believe, however, this restaurant has the best hummus in Jerusalem.
In addition, there are many different cultures in Jerusalem. In Jerusalem you can see Jews and Muslims, religious and non-religious, walking together in the same street. For instance, many neighborhoods in Jerusalem are ultra-orthodox neighborhoods. The ultra-orthodox people live in a very special way. The men do not work, but study the old Jewish law their entire lives. In addition, those people live exactly as people lived two hundred years ago. For example, they neither watching television nor using computers. I think that it is fun to live in a city with so many different cultures.
The problematic characteristic of Jerusalem is the traffic. The roads in Jerusalem have been built many years ago, and do not changed so much since then. Because of the narrow streets, it is hard to extend the streets today. Therefore, the traffic in Jerusalem is very bad. One can spend couple of hours every day in the roads. As a result, I prefer to use public transportation, such as trains and buses.
In conclusion, Jerusalem is a very unique city, with great restaurants and interesting cultures. The main disadvantage in Jerusalem is the traffic jam.
(This is only an exercise. it should not be taken seriously :))
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Hi! I will take the toefl test this weekend, I would love to get corrections :)
Both the reading passage and the lecture are about the the first human domestication of grain. The author claims that the first grain that ancient people domesticated was wheat, in order to prepare bread. He describes three stages in the develop of the bread. The ancient people first discovered that it is better to eat the wheat seeds after they had been crushed. Afterwards, they put it inside the fire and foud that the test of the cooced wheat is better. The last stage discovered when the premitive people left the crushed wheat in the open air and it begun fremeting the wheat.
The lecturer, however, casts doubt in the theory of the author. She thinks that the bear was the first grain-based food. She says that it is more likly that the production of the bear was discovered before the bread. First, she argues that all the three stages that the reading mantiond are not trivial. For example, according to the professor, there is no reason why the ancient people should try to put the wheat inside the fire. She claims that in those days people did not use to cook they food yet. Therefore it is strange that they tried to burned the wheat seeds.
On the other hand, the production of bear is more obvious, according to the lecturer. In order to make a bear one just has to leave the seeds in a moise envairment. Unlike the process of making the bread, the bear proces did not require any human efforts. For those reasons it is more likely that the bear was first to discovered.
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Hi! I will take the toefl test next week, who want to help me? #1 :)
What are the characteristics of a good supervisor is an important question. I believe that the most important quality in a good boss is knowledge. Additionally, a good supervisor has to be kind to his workers and to be open-minded.
First, a good supervisor should know his subject well. As he is the person who should answer the questions of his employees, he should know every aspect of the work. For example, a head of a team in a computer company should know the very recent methods in programing in order to advise his team.
Additionally, a good supervisor has to be kind. Although some people believe that a boss should be tough and aggressive, I think that a kind and nice behavior work better. Moreover, he should help his workers whenever they need him, even in personal issues. For instance, if an employee needs to leave early for he has a private event, the boss should be kind and let him go. This employee will work better afterwards.
The final important characteristic in a supervisor is open-mindedness. A good boss should be able to listen to the ideas of others, and then decide whether or not he wants to adopt them. Because all of us make mistakes from time to time, it is important to listen to other points of view.
In conclusion, a good supervisor should know his subject well, should be kind to his workers and should be open minded. Those characteristic would help him to lead his company to success.
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Teacher or self-learning?
Many people think that it is always better to learn with a teacher. However, in my opinion it is better to be able to learn by yourselves whenever it is possible. Self-learning increases the freedom of a student, saves large amount of money for him and improves his future opportunities.
A person who studies by himself can do it without any constraints. He can decide on the hour he likes to start learning, on the time he spends on every subject and even on the clothes he wears. On the contrary, a person who has a teacher has to learn exactly in the way the teacher wants. For example, if the teacher can teach only in the morning, and the student did not sleep well and want to learn afternoon, he cannot do it. However, if that student was learning by himself he was able to change his schedule.
Moreover, it is more economical to learn by yourself. A private teacher costs a lot of money. For example, in Israel one hour of private teacher costs about 40 dollars. If a student learns 20 hours on a month, it will cost him 800 dollars. This example illustrates that self-learning can save a lot of money.
Finally, it is important ability to be able to learn by yourself. In the time of school, a student can decide whether to learn with teacher or to learn by himself. Afterwards, no one will be there to teach him. For example, a person that needs to learn new subject for his work has to do it by himself. Therefore, a student who learns to be autodidact acquires important skill for his future.
In conclusion, I think that it is better to learn by yourself. It is enlarges your freedom, saves a lot of money and helps you in the future. Therefore I am highly recommended to do it whenever it is possible.
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The suppression of forest fiers
Both the reading passage and the lecture are about the results of the decreasing of the amount of forest distraction by fire. The author thinks that the nature system benefits from that. He says that the fire suppression made the trees live longer and improved the health of them. Moreover, the animals that live in the forest are not burned to death anymore. Hence, their population can grow.
The lecturer casts doubt on the benefits of the fire suppression. She claims that the forest needs fires from time to time in order to keep his balance. She illustrates it by the lives of the oak trees. The oak trees need a lot of light when they young. The absence of fires prevent them from getting enough light. Therefore the new oak trees cannot replace the old trees. The maple trees are another kind of tree that hurts from the large competition that happen as a result of the absence of forest fires.
In addition, the professor says that the increase of the populations of the deer is not so good to the ecological system. For example, the deer eat the new oak trees and not let them grow.
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Are university should be provided free to everyone?
Many people think that the university should be provided free to everyone. However, it is my opinion that it is better to charge the students in the cost of their studies. I think that student who pays for his studies will be a better student. Moreover, poor students will find the way to achieve the money they need for their studies. Finally, the country can finance good students but not everybody.
First, I think that one that pays for something enjoys it better. Student who pays a lot of money will study better and will not waste his time. Researches have found that high school students who pay for a privet classes invest more efforts than students who get those classes for free. I think that this policy will decrease the level of the universities.
Second, people that want to study in university but do not have enough money will find a way to get that money. For example, they can borrow the money from banks and bring it back afterwards. In my opinion, this problem will not prevent a student who really wants to study in the university from doing so.
Third, I think that the government can support only poor students with good grades instead of support everyone. That policy will encourage only the good students to go to university. The government will save large amount of money which can be invested in more important goals.
In conclusion, I think that the disadvantages of this program are greater than the advantages. In my opinion the government should support only the good students.
(It is just exercise, not my real opinion :) )
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Building of a new restaurant in your neighborhood
Although many people dislike the building of new restaurants in their neighborhood, in my opinion the advantages of it are greater than the disadvantages. A restaurant in the neighborhood save time for the local people, increase the benefits from tourism and increase the price of apartments in the neighborhood.
First, a new restaurant in the neighborhood saves important time for the people who live there. People use to eat at restaurants from time to time. If there are no restaurants in their neighborhood, they have to drive to other place in order to find one; this is a waste of time. Moreover, part of the people in the neighborhood do not have car. As a result, they have to take bus or taxi when they want to eat out. The building of new restaurant will save a lot of time to everyone.
Second, new restaurant increase the number of people who come to visit the neighborhood and hence the benefits of the people there. No one wants to visit in a neighborhood without entertainment places. New restaurant attracts people from other places to visit the neighborhood. When those people come to the neighborhood, they buy in shops next to the restaurant, and support the local businesses.
Third, the building of the new restaurant will increase the price of the houses in the neighborhood. For the reasons I mentioned above, people prefer to leave in a neighborhood with entertainment places, such as restaurants. Therefore, the demand for apartments will increase and also the price of the apartment.
In conclusion, in my opinion the neighborhood benefits from building of new restaurants. It is economical and it is improve the quality of the local people's life.
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The effect of cell phones on traffic accidents
Both the reading passage and the lecture are about the effect of cell phones on traffic accidents. The author of the article claims that the extended use of cell phones increases the risk for traffic accidents. Talking on cell phones distracts the driver's attention from the road and hence increases the risk for accident. The author mentions that many countries restrict the use of cell phones while driving for those reasons.
The lecturer, however, thinks that it is not accurate to blame the use of cell phones in all of the traffic accidents. He says that the reason for 80% of traffic accidents are driver's attention, but the use of cell phones is not the only reason for that. The lecturer mentions researches that found that other activities, such as eating or talking to other people in the car, cause more problems in the attention of the drivers.
Moreover, cell phones contribute to the safe of the people on the road. The lecturer says that more than 100,000 emergency calls accepted every day. Those calls save the lives of many people.
He concludes that we do need to be careful with the use of cell phones while driving, but remember the positive sides of them.
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Toefl integrated essay #3
Both the reading passage and the lecture are about the effect of cell phones on traffic accidents. The author of the article claims that the extended use of cell phones increases the risk for traffic accidents. Talking on cell phones distracts the driver's attention from the road and hence increases the risk for accident. The author mentions that many countries restrict the use of cell phones while driving for those reasons.
The lecturer, however, thinks that it is not accurate to blame the use of cell phones in all of the traffic accidents. He says that the reason for 80% of traffic accidents are driver's attention, but the use of cell phones is not the only reason for that. The lecturer mentions researches that found that other activities, such as eating or talking to other people in the car, cause more problems in the attention of the drivers.
Moreover, cell phones contribute to the safe of the people on the road. The lecturer says that more than 100,000 emergency calls accepted every day. Those calls save the lives of many people.
He concludes that we do need to be careful with the use of cell phones while driving, but remember the positive sides of them.
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Toefl independent essay #2
The people around us have great influence on our lives. Not only our family and friends are important, but also the people who live near us. Good neighbors are very important to the quality of our lives. In my opinion, the most important quality in a neighbor is that he will be kind and nice. In addition, a good neighbor should help to his neighbors when they need him.
First, a neighbor should be kind to the people who live near him. He should smile to them and say "good morning" when he sees them. It is not fun to live near a person who does not smile to you. For example, when I lived in Jerusalem three years ago, I had too neighbors in my building. One of them was very kind while the other was unkind. Every time I saw the kind neighbor he asked me how I feel and make me feel better. One the other hand, the unkind neighbor tried to avoid from me, and the meeting with him was unpleasant.
Second, a good neighbor must be able to help his neighbors when it is necessary. All of us need help from time to time, but some of us are not want to help others when they need us. An important quality of a good neighbor is that he agrees to help his neighbors when they need him. For instance, in recent years I live in Tel Aviv. Two months ago I wanted to build a new table, but I lost my hammer. I went to the apartment of my neighbor and asked him to bring me hammer for few minutes. He refuted to do so. Several days afterwards, the same neighbor had problem to open his door, so he came to my apartment and asked me using my cellophane and I helped him. If he was kind in the first place, all of us were benefits from it.
In conclusion, good neighbors are very important to our lives. If they are kind and have willingness to help the other people in the neighborhood, the lives of everyone become better.
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